He loves me..
He loves me not!
He loves me?
He never did.
echoing through my head
speaking through my veins
questioning "love"
sweet words dipped in poisons
sticking daggers in hearts
Ripping emotions from flesh
Burning lies on tongues
Breaking down minds
does he love me
or does he love my pain..
A contest entry
- PREWRITES!!!!!! by Luminescence.
450 points, ended March 5, 2008, 69 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me something that will make me feel.... by boydamaged.
550 points, ended February 28, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is great. I love it.
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Sometimes I have had to wonder the exact same thing. Lucky for me the grace of God has taught me that some people love their own pain so much they like to share.
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lol. yeah. *hugs*
thanks for your comment =)
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how sad such a happy yellow center, is left at the end of all of your pulling and tugging to get your love or not,, sometimes you get lucky and the last petal attached becomes his arms, sometimes you lose and are left with emptiness. great write.~~~Artis
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WWWWWWOOOOOWWWWW!!!!! I LOVED THIS POEM!!! It really hit me, as I am sure it would hit every girl who has ever been in that place with a guy. The picture really gives it that something extra. The flow was great, the wording a new and inventive. Great job, thanks for entering and good luck.
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OH WOW... this was great... I LOVED it really I did. It was written wonderfully.
Thank you so much for sharing you poem with me and good luck.
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Very powerful piece you have here... i really like how you started out... and put an interesting twist on things... Your language was great and so was your imagery...
~ wonderful job
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Wow, that is amazing. I love the picture as well. It's short and sweet (well, maybe not sweet, but I think you know what I mean LoL). Especially for me, I think it's something (like I say, for me at least) I can relate to completly. I'd like to pick a line an say that it was my favorite, but each one is wonderful, and each one holds something amazing with in it. "Sweet words dipped in poisons........Burning lies on tongues" is probably my favorite part though
. Good luck in the contest! You deserve the win! Keep up the amazing work!
xx
V/E
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Now that is deep lil sis. So many questions and so few answers - until the end of the piece. But then the questions start over again, like an eternal circle going round and round in your head. Wonderful writing honey.
Love
Wayne
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