I can hear your voice a couple feet away
just the sound makes my body sway
I'm holding on for dear life
but it's so hard to put up a fight
Like thunder completely out of control
Like a fire burning up my soul
Don't stand too close...
God I can't even breathe
Please get away from me
Cast your spell on someone else's heart
I'd walk away but it's just too hard.
Author notes
Not my favorite really but I wrote it the other night and like it. Might not be finished but I wanted to see what someone thought.
Very Personal
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I really do like this but I agree with you on the idea that there should be more. It gives good imagery, and maybe I'm just slow (haha) but I think there should be more as to what exactly is going on and maybe why.
~*~Gi~*~
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