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Now You're Gone

Now that you're not here,
with me,
I feel like there is a part of me not there,
a hole in my heart,
a piece of the jigsaw is missing,
the jigsaw that is my soul.
I crave just to see you again,
every cell in my body cries out for you,
yearns just to see you,
to hear your voice,
your calm, soothing voice.
Just once more.
But I know why you had to leave me,
I understand why you had to go,
I'm thinking of you now,
I hope you won't forget me,
because I'll never forget you.

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Username: RainbowGirl257

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  • animated lies
    March 7

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    I've felt this way before. Its very difficult and hard to get through. Thank you for sharing this with the group.

    animated

  • Hetha gold member
    March 7

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    It's hard when you miss someone this much, but you express it well, and penned a beauty.

  • grannyeri gold member
    March 7

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    Sentiments well expressed in these lines - we miss someone but know why they left and know it was the best thing to do that. Someone we will always remember.

  • maralisa silver member
    March 6

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    this is a poem full of heartfelt emotions about your loss it has alot of power thank you for sharing this with the group


  • Piccola gold member
    March 4

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    I only see two metaphors; the hole and the jigsaw...if you don't explain them (which you shouldn't) you are left with little. Perhaps the problem is to expand and use not explanation but more metaphores. Still, it had lots of feeling. Thank you for sharing with the group.

  • Friday gold member
    February 27

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    I think the only problem with this piece is you explain your metaphors too much. Just let them sit and let the reader draw what they will from them. Other than that it was beautiful. Thank you

  • Starlight-Owl
    February 23

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    This reminds me of New Moon. But that's proabaly just because I am strange. Anyway, I loved this piece a lot. It was so perfect so serene and yet so emotional. Thank you for the entry and welcome to the finalists list.

  • RainbowGirl257
    February 23
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    Grand Theft Autumn

  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    February 22

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    oh this is so touching and said:S ur last line means alot but its so sadd:S good lucks in da contest


  • RainbowGirl257
    February 22
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    thanks for pointing that pout leone! ive changed it now, it was supposed to say @ I'm thinking of you now

  • StarLightResurrects gold member
    February 21
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    its sad but a great write! nice caroline

  • Ja Devalesa
    February 21

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    Lovely poem.
    In this line, 'I'm thinking you now,' did you mean 'OF you' or 'you KNOW'? I'm confused.

    Other than that, though, it all rings clearly, and is very touching. Bravos for you!


  • Xx Scarlet Dove xX
    February 21
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    Wonderful!!

    The ending is beautiful. I know how you feel. This is such a sad yet lovely poem! Well done.

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