The devil's eyes
grasps your soul.
The passion burns
with a fearsome frenzy.
The taste of forbidden fruit
dances with your tongue.
The tango of your loins
yearn to be subdued.
A gasp of breath escapes
as if casting a spell.
Whispering softly into your senses.
Telling its' tantalizing secrets.
The air permeates
with the cackle
of sins' enjoyment.
As it begins to lead.
The kiss of insanity
toys with your mind
as you lose yourself
in the void of pleasure.
The devil's smirk
signifies its' end
leaving its' scar of lust
on your tainted soul.
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I liked parts of this, but think it works better without the "devil" reference. I was distracted by the repeated misuse of the apostrophe in the possessive "its", and the lack of it in "sin's". Picky, but it's an error that changes the meaning, and breaks the flow of the read.
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