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Wind Walking

 

 

                                                              

 

 

I have come a long way

from there to here now;

walked away from this pillow of dispair

that never cradled my head;

-captive-a prisoner of too many trespassers

here-on this crumbling piece of concrete,

I leave my footprints-I feel the warmth in the distance;

shadows left behind-the golden glow of the sun ahead,

one step at a time [windwalking] no need to look back;

I have come a long way.

 

 

 

02/21/2008

Author notes

let the words speak for themselves to each individual that might read.......
PS: I can only get the title to show up as brackets [even though it is titled "Wind Walking" any suggestions on how I can fix that? thank you,

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  • Peter.0 gold member
    March 15

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    i didn't congratulate you reenie on your gold,well deserved,,i am so pleased you were recognised hugs peter xx

  • HeavenScent4U
    February 25

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    this is very thought provoking and so full of emotion. there is despair yet hope in this and although it was written for this image, i do feel some of you within these words too sis thanks for this wonderful entry and good luck. be well and be blessed

    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      February 25
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      oh sweet sissy....you do know me too well. You are so correct. I strictly used the picture as a prompt, but I was able to relate to my own words [for so many different reasons of course than I am assuming this girl is]. But the bottom line of the feelings is the same,
      much love
      xoxoxoxoxoxo
      reenie
      PS no, I am not buttering up the hostess. Her and I always relate to each other in this loving way....be it that it is in a contest or not [we speak the same language of the soul]

  • one shot
    February 24

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    Wow... C'est magnifique! Your words are always greatly soothing and beautifully handled in your poetry...
    A very deep interpretation of the picture. I love the flow of the poem, and the imagery and alliteration. The contrast between shadows and golden glow of the sun was, I felt, very effective, and so was the closing line... Short, to the point, yet says so much.

    s Continue à écrire!!!


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      February 25

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      je vous remercie de tout mon coeur pour ces mots a quis je me trouve avec un sourire heureuxurghhhhh, c'est trop longtemps que j'avais la chance de parler ou ecrire en Francais , et j'ais oublie beaucoup

      reenie

  • tomisb
    February 22

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    The first line sets the mood and then you don't explain what that means (thank god) but explore how the mood relates to the vision. I can hear you musing through the young woman's stance. The sense of permance and yet knowing nothing lasts. Beautifully done. I am reading at Bus Boys and Poets in Shirlington this Monday night.
    Love, Tom B.


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      February 25
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      I am meeting with antique furniture appraiser tonight. Do send me a schedule of your readings as far ahead as you have them. One of these days.....I will just gently grab your hand from behind and lead you off the stage and will interrupt your word dance....just call me Sadie Hawkins
      love that you loved me only setting the mood and not elaborating [each reader can draw their own conclusion] That is what writing is about anyway...oui??????
      much love
      xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
      reenie

  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    February 21

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    This tells me you have had to fight some dragons of despair. Sorry that you had to edure that! Yet, I think this was such a well written piece and it shows your strenght!!!

    Best of luck.
    Love
    Becks


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      February 22
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      thanks Becks. Yes, I am fighting some dragons at the present time [however the write was this picture prompt] so I wrote mostly from the girl's perspective, however I guess in some sort of way it could be related to self in some sort of way [just different circumstances than one would have at her tender age]
      thanks again and much love
      xoxoxo
      reenie

  • yumanbeing gold member
    February 21

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    urban beauty

    I loved this
    the contrast of hope springing from an urban environment
    the view forward -
    the lack of self pity
    emphasis on confidence -
    superb


    • cherche -d -ame gold member
      February 22
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      thanksquite a great interpretation on personal present circumstances [even though it is a picture prompt]. But hope has to spring eternal as well as confidence [not just in self-but in the future as well] Just have to find that road that leads UPhill again...and I will!
      z
      reenie

  • Peter.0 gold member
    February 21
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    best of luck in the contest, nice perspective on the promp.. provoking write xxx pp

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