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~When Past Met Present....~

Summer sighs to the whispered rustle
As the wind concocts a patent bustle
Where lies the peace of endless dales
Dreaming daintily of unspoken tales,
As the past and present tend to hustle

Moments melted in the embers of time
In Galariels glade which flows in rhyme
Of evanescent beauty, in emotions born
As petty patience brews love to adorn
And melodies avail a medium to chime

Rain reigns madness on rainbow skies
Like children in plays frenzied cries
Ships slip upon dank eclipse in pain
In an obscure odyssey that entertains
Yet ends with news of yesterdays demise

Arid ardor now contemplates the trite
As acid lays green, the land in blight
In nostalgia as the past meets present
Gathering together in cherished content
Today has died, yet tomorrow shall alight



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Prompt :
Where I could find the moments blown upon fields of yesterday, my thoughts left stirring in tomorrow's whispered gathering…
Picture by DavidHR

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  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    Excellent!

    A wonderful poetically penned poem...the imagery is outstanding and so is the delicate balance of word choice, placed just so the reader is left in awe...an absolute joy and delight to be bookmarked and re-visited again and again...congratulations on winning the silver trophy

    Love and blessings...~Lilac


  • Shamanicmusings
    March 7, 2008

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    Simply Wonderful

    This speaks of those lost days and of remembered walks in leafy lanes, now changed and lost in time, replaced by harsh fences around housing estates to keep out the locals..........


  • animated lies
    March 7, 2008

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    Really amazing imagery and poetic devices. Its very in depth and captivating. Thank you for sharing this with the group.

    animated


  • tawk gold member
    March 6, 2008

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    Wow what amazing imagery and emotion within your beautiful write!! I especially loved the last line it leaves one with a sense of hope for the future. Wonderful write. Congrats on the Silver well deserved


  • ronnica
    March 5, 2008

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    The first stanza was the best for me,"where lies the peace of endless dales" but I really enjoyed the whole , the rhyme and flow were so fitting for the prompt, Much enjoyed piece.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    March 5, 2008

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    This is lovely I really like the alliteration, and the flow and rhyme work perfectly together... Congratulations on a well deserved silver - this piece was a joy to read... thank you for sharing

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • Rita Krocha
    March 3, 2008
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    Very nice and a delight to read~
    I especially love the last line, it gives me hope!


  • Lady Altheia
    March 3, 2008

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    This is very nice and serene. I like the personification I picked up on the gales on your poem. Congrats on your silver trophy.


  • The Hermit
    March 3, 2008

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    It flows perfectly and it give great imagery because we don't know it but we die every night and we are born again every morning.


  • individuality gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    aye tomorrow is yet to strike the match in front of our faces and burnwith all the passion of alive, that becomes now


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    March 3, 2008

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    I like the rhyme scheme you've used. It's pleasant to vary from the usual quatrain every now and again. I loved your imagery in the 2nd stanza particularly, especially the Lord of the Rings reference!


  • Tazmanian Poet
    March 3, 2008

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    So,

    Honestly,i do believe this is the most amazing piece i have read to this date.It is amazing,i cant explain it.You have a talent,that i wish i could posses.Keep it up.


    • wakingdevil
      March 3, 2008
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      Thx for the winderful comment but this nowhere near being good enough


  • maa gold member
    February 23, 2008

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    a masterpiece of exceptional beauty and wisdom ...
    congratulations on your much deserved silver-trophy ...
    I am very proud of you, my "wakingangel" !


    maa


  • poetryality silver member
    February 22, 2008

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    Your poem is exceptional. The rhyme and flow is written effortlessly, although I am sure the measure of time spent to write this wondrous work was not without thought. There is passion here and a sense of being. You out did yourself here poet. Very worthy of the merit received.

    Congratulations on earning the Silver Cup!



    Much Love & respect ♥

    Renee


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    Beautifully written, excellent rhyme and flow, I enjoyed this take on the prompt, Hugs, Bunny

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