there is nothing
but a body to devour,
only a sight to comfort
the disgust of two naked bodies
and to give the afflicted heart
a limbo where i play to be
a woman.
Author notes
dark in my heart...
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I can see where "sex" can get to a point where it's just an obligation or something to be done. Guess it's why I love the idea of love making over sex since anyone can have sex. What a way to release what's inside you and glad you can express it in a creative way.
Ted E
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this was a very differnt and dark take on the subjet, your originality is your talent
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I have never looked at it quite that way. Yes we play and giggle and moan but I never thought ofit as being in limbo. Prison or paradise but never limbo. lol -
a dark...sad side to sex.
good job.=]
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Excellent
Excellent write. You express your feelings so well.
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thoughts are the thing that cause the lasting sensations,i think... bodies are like doorways; but then there are those times when the doorway seems to matter so much...wonderful writing here...PK
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Hello there, Leslie!
I’m glad I came along and clicked on your poem. It made me think of sex in a different way and that's an amazing thing for a poem to achieve.
Thanks for sharing your thoughtful meditation with us.
Have an awesome day,
BJ.
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liked the way ya described a way of was really tha up and up on body bangin liked it
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I remember
when i was young how the sex was a builder of ego and how some young ladies readily gave to keep their guys. Now sex has become a dream the leaves my mind in limbo.
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you know I'm not that old but being in a relationship for so long, sometimes it leaves you wanting a dreamy experience... and yes I love when guys boost their egos with sex
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thanks for the comment.
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That was deep. I like this. There is more to this then meets the eye. Well done.
Wayne Leon
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LOL!
nice comment deena..
whoaaw girls way different than guys..
xD
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Sex...remember when it was new and we were all excited about it? It was the greatest thing since Ice Cream...now reality has checked in and we know its basicly just another freakin' chore to do. Another role we play, as a woman.
Love you~
Reality Bites!
Deena
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I really love this. The title really caught my eye haha. Anyway. I really really like this. Aren't I redundant. But anyway. I like... um the word "disgust" in this poem. It says so much. And when you say you "play to be a woman". That's really brilliant. Good stuff. Love you!
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Oh thanks my love, I love that word too speacially when I'm talking about sex .... ummm after not writing for so long, anything is good!!!! you know comments from you always makes my heart all warm inside..
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Yes, this is dark, Leslie.... such a sense of discomfort and deep pain about this 'sex' poem...and the last two lines really hits one hard "where i play to be a woman"....that one aches. So much depth of emotion in these few lines - almost a sense of detachment here....
~ Nicolette
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thanks for your comments, I know you are one that understands that even in the light there is always dark.
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I liked it but it kinda didnt make sense to me lol
Cindy
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its ok that it didn't made sense to you, sometimes there is words and lines put together that touches something even when we don't know why.
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