Image Credit White Field © David Levinson
Upon a wind-swept winter field
where frost now covers summer yield,
the solstice glints on sun-iced crust
where once such range was full, robust
and filled with crop and pride revealed.
Harsh bleakness blusters wintry realm
and frosted cold holds tight to helm
while hands of winter mark her stead
as if the day bled branded dead
disguised as such to overwhelm.
Yet here beneath this frozen soil
wrapped waiting for the spring in coil
lie shoots and sprouts of tender green
expecting birth where they'll be seen
as harvest reaped from labor's toil.
When farmer's plow pushed on to till
the season's frost released its chill
from warming earth, each mounded rise
where rules held rules; no compromise
for staggered lanes, seeded with skill.
Showing me paths as it saw fit,
cycles of life, where I submit,
whose trace of seasons on my brow
have grayed the locks that I wear now
and leave me cause to ponder it.
Author notes
Emulating Frost's Ghost House
A contest entry
- Robert Frost-based Contest for Allpoetry, Winklings & Friends #51 by Lyndon.
2590 points, ended March 14, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very beautiful poem i loved it
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Thank you. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
~Pamela
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I have only recently begun to explore the great ones. Robert Frost being one of them. Aside from the fact that your poem is stunning in the harsh beauty you have so well portrayed, It also reads, as if Frost wrote it himself. Well deserving of the Gold
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Thank you. You are kind to say such things. I appreciate your beautiful words and hope you are well. 
Thank you again dear soul. ~Pamela 
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reserve comment
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Great . .
The only thing that somehow bothered me was the line . . "for staggered lanes, seeded with skill".
I think the word "with" needed to be overcome . .
Haha sorry about that it is just me . .
A wonderful poem, I love it . .
Albert.
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No apology necessary. Always open to suggestions and of course there is always room for improvement. Thank you for taking a moment. I appreciate it so much. ~Pamela
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Robert Frost is tied with Elizabeth Barrett Browning as my favorite poet, and this is so "him"
The ending
"Showing me paths as it saw fit,
cycles of life, where I submit,
whose trace of seasons on my brow
have grayed the locks that I wear now
and leave me cause to ponder it."
especially reminded me of something HE would write...
Just beautiful! Congrats on the well deserved feature!!!
Lynda
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Thank you Lynda. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. Frost is also one of my favorite poets. I am so pleased you enjoyed this and appreciate your kind comments. ~Pamela
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I would say...
"Incredible", but to be fair to that word... I find this highly credible. It has made me want to return home at lunch and devour some more of Frost's work... from a book I received from my favorite uncle back in '79 or so. The words and images flew off the page and rolled off my mind's tongue, as it were. The gold trophy doesn't seem like enough. There should be a "Diamond" trophy category... and this would be one of the poems to measure against to see if others were worthy. I know this sounds like so much gushing praise... like a "fanboy", but this really struck me and will stay with me for quite a long time. *thumbs up*
Write On!
jIM
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Thank you for such kind words on this piece. I am so pleased you enjoyed it and appreciate your wonderful words so much. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Pam
You certainly nailed this one. It flows like a smoothly undulating snow drift and makes this country boy dream. I also like the light difference at the end turning from the nature object to the author. Lovely! Tell me this is in a book.
Paul
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Thank you Paul. I am so pleased you enjoyed this. No this one is not in a book, but it could be. Thanks again. ~Pamela
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Ohyes, I saw Frost from the first line on down.
The ending stanza is beyond beautiful. Gives me pause too.
Quiet, unassuming, and lovely.
You never fail to evoke a variety of emotions, in your writing.
Fresh, clean and lovely Ms. Pamela.
Love always,
Jin
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Thank you so much for such kind words. I am pleased you enjoyed this. Thank you for your most kind comments. ~Pamela
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silly
one has to be original in meter also.no mr frost shall help you .if the mind thinks originally so should apoem.this is jack and jill stuff -
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can you do better?
probably not.
so just hush your naysaying.
it's ugly, and immature.
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Deliciously Frostian, and delicious in its own right too.
By coincidence I read an aabba quintain poem by Eusebius yesterday or the day before which reminded me to go back to Frost and I then wrote one
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Thank you Jeff. I will have to go and take a peek at your creations and find it as I am certain it will be a sheer delight to read with your wonderful skill for rhyme and meter. Thank you for such kind words. Most appreciated. ~Pamela
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This is such a lovely write ...
A beautiful gold my dear~
Many blessings
~A~
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Thank you so much. I am pleased you enjoyed this one. Great to hear from you. ~Pamela
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A very lovely and lyricl poem in the Frost tradition. Congratulation on winning the gold, you surely deserved it with this superb poem.
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Thank you my friend. Always a pleasure to receive your comments on my work. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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I can honestly say, this beautiful poem could take its place with honor alongside any of those crowned heads of poetry. It speaks with an earthiness that I find so dear, additionally grounded with a rhyme that I love. The cycles of our life, that we look back on in the autumn days of our lives, musing, when does the winter start, is it here already? The last verse is as real as the gray upon my own head. Coming from a free verse poet, this poem shows what a versatile writer that you are.
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Thank you so much dear soul. I am so pleased you have enjoyed this piece. Frost is one of my favorite poets and I love anything to do with nature.
So pleased for your words here. Thank you. ~Pamela
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This poem
not only evokes Frost country, but Frostian style and folksy philosophy especially in the powerfully evocative reminiscence of the final line. Powerful descriptions modulated wisely.
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This is excellent! So well rhymed and evocative of Frost country. I honestly felt it would be stronger to leave off the sixth and final stanza, though - ending for us "to ponder it."
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This poem is beautiful as is but
yes, I agree with you,Marcy. I cannot think the final stanza improves or 'crowns' the preceding stanzas. One is more likely to ponder the lovely lines if the poem ends in the Frostian manner, sweetly abrupt: "leave me cause to ponder it". -
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Ron, ea
I could not agree more.
and so...
It is gone!
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I'm Ron. Be back later. -
Very good rendition of emulating Robert Frost. Nicely done. Excellent imagery and word usage. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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This is incredible. Such a wonderful journey through winter into springtime. I LOVED the last stanzas, they were especially VIVID!!! This is EXCELLENT, your usual style and grace shining through.
Lady D
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beautifully penned, you've created such wonderful imagery throughout this piece. A thoroughly enjoyable read.
Rory
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I can feel the winter cold aand often I have felt the joy of another spring. This is truly a master piece to honor Robertr Frost.
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What a beautiful poem to grace
AP as a front page, as it were, to this site! Congratulations, Pamela. It is not an accident of fortune that this poem is here. Ron.
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Beautiful
Such a wonderfully rich poem. Well done my friend.
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I love that picture it's like a lot of scenes
where I live now. I live near farm country.
Lovely poem Pam, reminds me of my grandpa's fields.
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I love it !
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Even the the cold...
...of winter(which you described to perfection!) couldn't freeze my feelings of warmth when I read this beautifully eloquent piece of artistry!
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Too fast ! too fast!
I so enjoyed your poem filled with imagery and it was well written in the style of Frost. Thanks for sharing it ... joy
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