on snow crusted branch
the cardinal bows to cold
as spring sun rises.
A contest entry
- ~ Haiku ~ A contest for all Winklings & their Friends #54 by Lyndon.
1000 points, ended March 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a wonderful little poem
and I thank you for it.
You have built in contrat and season and positioning of the subject, the cardinal.
Fine work. Thank you.
Lyndon of the Winklings. -
Love the lines and think you have created a wonderful nature portrait.
Sweet enchantment of the arrival of spring in spite of the cold. 
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Yes! welcome spring, adieu to cold.
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worship
hello there!
Your haiku makes it sound as if the cardinal is worshipping the cold; that is why the bird is bowing to the cold. It's an interesting image! How does a bird bow to the cold? I don't get it! It's intriguing but I don't understand what you are trying to show me. I hope you can explain it to me as I'm very interested to have this haiku unlocked for me.
Best of wishes in the contest.
Have a gr8 day,
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watch a bird.
Then reply again. As far as what they bow to...? That is up to personal interpretation, poetic license and the impression the watcher gets at any given moment of watching.
I got one impression, you another. We all place our own believes and feelings into what we see and what we write or read.
But really, watch a bird. They are very enlightening.
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