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Only A Dream

Her hair swings around her face,
Blocking her vision.
Arms outstretched,
Reaching out to him.
But instead,
She falls to the ground laughing.

His gentle, strong arms lift her off the ground,
As she screams and clings to his arm.
She can feel his chest vibrating with his deep laughter.
It’s just like old times.

Back before the war on hearts broke out.
Back before she lost all sense of love,
And she wandered around,
Lost.

If only all it took was love.
She would’ve been there for a very long time.
Happiness.
Love.
Acceptance.

With him,
That’s what she feels.
No matter if she’s right next to him,
Her heart beats a mile a minute.
But he’s not even hers.
She loves him so much.

She latches her hands onto his arms,
Forcing him to follow her.
Spinning so fast,
She can’t see anything but him.
Hair billowing,
Never stopping.

Their laughter mixes until it becomes one.
Suddenly he pulls her close,
Then all she sees is darkness.
It wasn’t meant to be,
Once again.

She’s left alone,
Lying on the cold ground,
Shivering and crying out for someone.
She tries to pick herself up,
But to no avail.
She gets her arms up,
But it’s just too much.
Everything keeps piling up on her back,
Bending her until she breaks.

Tears stream down her face,
Her eyes telling of what she needs,
But saying that no one will listen.
Can she ever get through to them?

Sometimes her voice comes out stronger.
Those are the times when she becomes bold,
But they pass quickly.

Someone is always on the other side,
All she has to do is get there…

Author notes

“I know what’s best for me, but I want you instead.”
-Over and Over Three Days Grace


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  • HereComesTheSun
    April 28, 2008

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    just tells a story as if i was reading a book, i can really connect i love the line But he’s not even hers.
    She loves him so much. just well done


  • LadyUnique silver member
    March 3, 2008

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    'back before the war on hearts broke out' is my favorite line. it's clever and would be a great prompt for a contest
    thanks for entering and good luck


  • The Slant
    February 27, 2008
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    you do a good job of making the reader want them to be together, making it more emotional when it doesn't work out for her. some of it seems a little juvenile like "then all she sees in darkness" and "everything keep piling up on her back" but a lot if it is mature ideas. overall, good write. good connection with the reader yet still personal. thanks for entering.


  • Ale E
    February 24, 2008

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    This is a very good poem. Im also familiar with the song which is also like an added bonus.

    I wish you the best of luck in my contest. Thank you for entering.

    ale xox


  • Hells Bells
    February 21, 2008

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    Lost for words

    Amazing sis it really is . Your poetry is getting better alot better. I don't want to say but I've gone through and my fav stanza's are 3-5 8-9 and the last one.


  • Melissa Burns
    February 21, 2008

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    Very well written poem - I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for entering it into my humble little contest - good luck!


  • blue-eyed-disaster
    February 20, 2008

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    very interesting, very sad too. i loved how u started it, very cute, it makes a good point, how things change and everything. great job.

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