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Saving memories for later--

&& she's left behind--coating memories in cellophane,
She might be back to collect them later.

So let's go dancing--
spin me around in the colours,
Let's destroy this dance-floor.
Ohh && did I tell you?
Baby, I'm bad news.

She's never been one for sweet love lies
&& yet, he fuels her on them.
No-one wonders why she's left alone in the corner.
He throws her into the sky
making endless promises to catch her, just to walk away.

She's lying underneath a polka-dot blanket
of golden sparkly stars.
Where are you now? Who are you now--

Are you even seeing your beautiful babygirl?

 

She's pressed against the rough field hay;

lips smothering hers, && hands are everywhere.

Who knew the same hands which are ever so gentle

can invade && destroy--

&& her world just turned black.

 

Suck away the colour, the magic, the grace.

She's left a stick person drawing--

clothes that will never fit hang off her.

She never eats. She never sleeps.

She's barely existing.

 

This rainbow has been sucked of colour--

Now she's just rain.

&& the tears run fast, her mascara black

&& her eyes are the only things to shine.

 

Walk away now baby, He's bad news.

&& Sweetie...

 

He always will be.

Author notes

Option 6- I used the quote 'Baby, I'm bad news'

I'm not really sure about this, I hope you like it but, I think I'll have another go tomorrow [=

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  • silver-X-lining gold member
    April 27, 2008
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    I love it! "She's never been one for sweet love lies
    && yet, he fuels her on them."


  • forbidden-colour
    March 24, 2008

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    "Where are you now? Who are you now--
    Are you even seeing your beautiful babygirl?"

    Beautiful interesting questions,

    &&

    "Walk away now baby, He's bad news.
    && Sweetie...
    He always will be."

    Chilling!

    Men can be A**holes sweety.
    But some of them are genuine.

    Love you.
    x





  • Dead Star--x
    March 3, 2008

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    woah

    wow! i dont know what to say-
    i dont like it



    i love it! jaw dropping poetry♥
    finalist*
    Dead Star--x


  • black lagoon x
    March 1, 2008

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    ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥

    coating memories in cellophane,
    She might be back to collect them later.

    i love it!
    one of my favorites <3
    bookmarked!
    good luck in the contest :]

    Cheerio,
    Cyanide


  • glitterSTARxxx
    February 22, 2008

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    Oh love =[
    this was so prettyful ♥
    I bet you'll do so well in the contest bbycakes
    this is one of my favorite poems in the contest
    i hope it'll be one of hers,too


  • WishMeAway--x
    February 21, 2008

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    baby.
    this is so sad.
    and i loved it.
    but so heartbreaking.
    i love you.

    like glitter&&glue

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