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Waiting & Fading

 

Hanging on with bleeding fingers
gripping tight to
what is lost,
Desperation in her whimpers
time is frozen
bitter frost.

Conscious fact without connection
she’s not coping
very well,
Ignorance is her protection,
reflection lost
tricky spell.

Wrapped in bondage of denial
heart beats bleeding
truth unheard
She hasn’t blinked in quite awhile
waiting for his
written word.

What she kept the most protected
in a little
heart shaped box,
Was a gift that he rejected
spinning her in
brutal shock.

So she sits in white and waiting
for a doctors
word to go,
Her reality is fading
what she's done she

doesn’t know.

Temporary insanity….
still she can not
understand,
Her love for him will never be
for his blood is
on her hands.

 














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jamiedoring

Trying something new....experimenting again. :-)

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  • Patpowers silver member
    April 30, 2008

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    This is sure one deep dark piece of poetry Jamie. I can see you deserved the gold trophies in this. Congratulations!

  • Rudolf
    April 10, 2008

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    I've read several angst, poems that you've written
    and I'm wondering where, the dark words are sitten
    seems that I'm seeking, a blackened dark coal write
    one that scares the devils, horns off of this site
    rudolf


  • GypsyEyes
    April 4, 2008

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    gripping tight to
    what is lost
    that's beautiful! i really love the image i get while reading this poem! thank you for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    April 1, 2008

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    jamiedoring

    Excellent Write Congratulations on both of the trophies. Thank you for commenting. Cara


  • peridotPixi
    March 9, 2008

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    deep

    emotional write, i like how you took the emotions from the picture, congrats on your gold, keep writing,


  • Micro
    March 9, 2008
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    Congratulations on winning the Gold trophy. You wrote a very powerful and wonderful poem.


  • Asylaarix
    March 8, 2008
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    Well you did very well with this one ... I love that you experiment ... it works well with this pic ... I loved it ... and you showed some true powerful imagery here ... very well done and very beautifully written ... I loved the concept of this piece ... Good work ... good luck in the contest ...

    Jayda


  • SchizoChic
    February 29, 2008
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    Simply beautiful. Great work.

  • dillpickle62
    February 21, 2008

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    Ew!

    You are truely gifted. This is an intense poem. This poem peaks on the 4th stanza for me and travels to the conclusion/wrap up nicely. This is for sure a Ew...! Piece of Poetry. A heavy...
    Good Luck in this contest. Your a true artist.


  • Preacher
    February 21, 2008
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    Kool Write

    Perfect for this picture. Good Job.

  • Destined4Destruction
    February 21, 2008
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    A very thought provoking write! Kudos to ya TARD.....


  • CanadianGirl1
    February 20, 2008

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    Amazing Write! I am truly at lost for words... trying something new? well my lord! this is seriously some amazing writing. I wish that I could form some better words... Keep it up!

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