Why do I exist
only to die away?
In the arms of the broken heart
In the arms of the broken heart
So tell me will I be the last to know?
To know you
Wish to be the first to show
to show you
wish I could
wish I could
In the arms of the broken heart
Close those eyes to let them dream
'cause there's no nightmares anymore
too many in the light of day
to break down midnights door
In the arms of the broken heart
In the arms of the broken heart
and never standing up
to see the mirror
to see the face
of bitter defeat
to feel the chest
to feel the beat
of the dying part
In the symphony
harmony
In the arms of the broken heart
In the arms of the broken heart
Like the echoes
why do I exist
only to die away?
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Give Me Everything! by Uncle Haku.
1400 points, ended March 10, 2008, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The flow could use some work, but I could definitely see what you were going for here. In some parts it was very well done, though in others it wasn't brought off quite so well. Good write.
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uh yea
I wasn't going for anything when I write I just write the way I feel it & the flow is perfect it's not a poem it's a song lol poetry is not made to be criticized its made to be felt
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Amazing loved this piece!
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the ending was fantastic
the whole thing is just harmonious and great
i'm always here for you!
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