Never been good enough
with your not so pretty face
just never been good enough
The way you walk
it's nothing special
your footprints never were that deep
never been good enough
just never been good enough
You speak, but
Your voice intoxicates
when it's put to melody
when push comes to shove
it could be better
better be
never been good enough
just never quite good enough
when you kiss me baby
the one that you love
it's never been never been
you've never been good enough
just never been good enough
To taste that sweetness
the one the world is bragging about
the happy you can't live without
To feel the feel of
that feeling you can only know
the feeling far to felt to show
the feel of
you
Have never been good enough
just never been good enough.
Author notes
A contest entry
- Give Me Everything! by Uncle Haku.
1400 points, ended March 10, 2008, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a new approach to an old subject, and you expressed the overall meaning well. In a few places, though, the lines either need punctuation or some deletions to actually make sense, namely in the extremely repetitive lines near the ends of some of your stanzas. Overall, good write.
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awwwwwwwwww omg hun this so sad! Are you okay, whats up in your life. ILY! hope things get better beautiful XD. Amazing write, i loved the repetition and
"
You speak, but
Your voice intoxicates
when it's put to melody
when push comes to shove
it could be better
better be
never been good enough
just never quite good enough"
that was lovely!
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Wow. I really don't even know what to say about this except for it's amazing. I'd like to know more about this, where you were coming from, what inspired you to write this, etc. It's an amazing piece and I'm verry interested.
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