This world we live in, it's a mask of hell's fire
Nature's beauty burns fed by greed's desires
The damned pierce us through and through, conjuring up their schemes
Thoughtlessly murdering the man who said he had a dream.
Hijacked planes come from mishappened minds
Bush fools no one, children do get left behind
Young sons of Africa, they're trained to kill
Slaying mothers, fathers, it drives them farther still
Inflamed with dirt, consumed with disease
We have no depth because we live only to please
Existing in a society that casts out the poor, the ugly
Just let them beg, who cares if they're hungry?
And united we stand, plagued by our inability to see
Never able to realize that freedom may never be free
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There's so much wrong with this world .... and so many don't even realize or can't come to understand the very horrific depth of it
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Such an arctic world we live in, as we don our apathetic coats against the woeful gales of suffering.
Not caring seems so easy.
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love the emotion behind this, and it is so true. With so many people turnong the blind eye to what they dont want to see even when it is right infront of them, and you put it wonderfully. I especially like the first verse, but my favorite line of all is "Bush fools no one, children do get left behind". Freedom isnt free and your writing does that more than just poetic justice.
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How right you are here - is it power that people want over others, money, oil, gas control? WHy one group thinks they are better than others; why not just live and let live, and each go on with their lives, and not try to run others around them, and make them the same as everyone else. Nice to be different and appreciate other qualities - no need to be envious or jealous of what others have. Just make the best of what you have and share excess with those who have little. Liked the flow, the rhythm, rhyme and message you share in these lines.
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I like this,I have been in a philosophical mood my self here,and i like the idea of this,Although re wording your lines and taking out some filler words would make this flow better and seem more professional.
Great job though,Good luck in all that you do
Bones
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Any peace lover is a friend of mine - keep up the good fight - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) -
You Hit The Nail On The Head
What more can I say? keep on writing - your mesdsage is clear - will we ever learn that we must not lord it over others just because we have the power to do so - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan)
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In my youth, this was "protest poetry" I am so sorry that not much has changed. Man is still man. Thankfully, there is hope; but man himself is not the author.
I like this poem for it's passion and eyes open questions. I do think it might help to tighten up the rhyme scheme, though the ragged tempo may suit just as well...
One nit, the first line of this pair seems not quite to fit with the really great line following:
Evil thrives they're better than they seem
They killed the man who had a dream
Cheers James
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