In hand to hand combat
to the death, we did fight
and we died here together
in the dawn’s early light.
Two strangers with families
we’d never more see,
but our governments told us
we were bad enemies.
So we battled it out,
and we both did our best,
to defend our beliefs
with our last final test.
But the battle goes on
and no-one has won,
as a war takes it toll
on the innocent’s son.
Author notes
war takes its toll.....no one really 'wins'....
Please tell me what you think
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Well penned
reflects my sentiments.....to a "t"...
being mothers of sons...it is so heartbreaking to see so many young lives lost, for nothing. Maybe someday, mankind will wake up!
Thanks for sharing~
Best wishes always!
me
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Thanks islekine - glad you enjoyed.
I don't think anyone really wins in a war - we all lose.
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this is clear
and the message is evident
and so needs to be heard
what loss for not
how sad are we
this is lovely
this is outside the box
where our beliefs are more of revenge and we are unable to see no one wins.
when the box get overwhelming everyone will step out
beautiful done with a touch of brilliance
God bless you my friend...
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Thank you so much 'Pices Rainbow' for such a lovely comment! I appreciate it, and am pleased you enjoyed this.
blessings
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Yes it does take its toll..
A great provoking poem you have penned here hun
Thank you for sharing
Best wishes
Julie
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Thank you Julie - so glad you enjoyed.
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Very unique take here.
I understand how love
sometimes alludes the muse. Proving there is so much more to life
delila
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Thank you so much 'delightfulness' for your nice comment and applause. Unique?...I'm prob. the only one who had this take...lol...Odd, maybe..
blessings
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I would not even of thought of this angle. Thankfully, our muses' don't always listen. Very good write here. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you so much 'pantress' for the nice comment and applause. I am pleased that you enjoyed this.
blessings
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This is so sad, and perfect as it is. You have done a wonderful job, you've rhymed to It flows effortlessly...looks like a gold to me...superb!
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Thank you 'LadyD' for the wonderful comment and applause. I'm real pleased you liked this one, that went a bit 'out of the box'...lol
War is sad - and no-one really ever wins.
best wishes
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I agree with all the comments before me! This sure looks like a winner to me. What a poignant tale you have told her! Brilliant hun!!
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Thank you so much 'kiwi..' for your wonderful comment and applause. I am very pleased that you liked this. I think I went way 'way outside' the box on this one...lol
blessings
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oh don't you dare touch this, this is sad but so well penned, to change it no way!!! poetry at your best, good luck,,sure looks like a winner!
Moons
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Thank you so much 'Moons' for your wonderful comment and applause. I appreciate it. I am pleased that you liked this.
blessings
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oh this is completely awesome I love it!
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Thank you so much 'MJ--ith' for reading and the wonderful comment. I hope the judge doesn't think it's way too different...lol.
blessings
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This is a fantastic take on the prompt ......I looked at this contest and like miost others thought lovers....well done...this rhymes effortlessly too....good luck...think you may have a winner here..
Rob...
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Thank you so much 'poppa' for the wonderful comment and applause. I thought 'lovers'...my muse did not!...lol
again, thanks.
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Oh wow this is an amazing take on the prompt fight to the death they did very nice take on the prompt goodluck in the contest much love
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Thank you so much 'Starz' for the wonderful comment and applause. I appreciate it.
Well, this isn't the 'normal' take on that picture, I'm sure....but then again??
best wishes
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This is just so wonderful! Such a true and sad verse. The last verse says it all...I hear this Sis, with all my heart! Best of luck!
Az
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Thank you so much 'Azlyn' for your wonderful comment and applause. This wasn't what I wanted to write..lol...but I think it does fit the picture. And war is sad....strangers die side by side for their beliefs, but nothing ever really changes.
again, thanks.
best wishes
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I like this, never argue with your muse, you will lose..
some suggestions though.. I will IM you with those..
I think that you did a great job.. you will do just fine.
good luck
kat
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Thanks so much 'kat' for the nice comment and applause. Nope, she wouldn't let me argue, but the words came too fast and I'm not totally satisfied with this....so your suggestions are welcome.
best wishes
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