Tempted to taste her lover's blood,
she, will not put this curse on him.
His blood is her weakness.
The temptation rises as they touch,
kisses, are like orgasms.
[Just one bite]
She knows the closest she will ever get
to pure happiness,
is to watch him walk away freely
as she lurks in the shadows.
In a list
A contest entry
- Semi Quickie by MysticalRayne.
475 points, ended February 21, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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kisses like orgasms
Fabulous and sexy write hun!
Congrats on the Bronze
♥
Stay safe
Love you
~Manda
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Excellent take on the prompt. A few minor things second line she should be lower case following a comma also kisses. 8th line to is lower case and 10 line as is lower case. I'll give you a few to change those and come back I do like this. Thank you and good luck in the contest
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Thank you, I have never been really good at punctuation, so I try to piece things together and see how I get by lol. Thanks for your comment, and your help.
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Emotional!
The sacrifices we make...Very moving! Best of luck in the contest! -
Wowzers!!! I really like what you did with this... she's knows she is dangerous and so keeps her distance!!
YEAH!! You totally nailed this one!
(4th line down closes.. should be closest? just checking sweetie)
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Oooh, I really like where you took this one. No being to have your true love... I can feel the emotion penned in this one. This will definately place!
~Cassie
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Thanks hun, I hope so
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