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Efflorescence



Frantically scrambling,
seeking a foothold
on your walls of polished glass.
Ebony reflections
of what I have become:
I fear my eyes betray my past.

My ravaged hands wide open,
I refuse to let you go.
Through jagged cracks in my defenses,
guilty indulgence faintly glows.
Within my frigid fortress burns
a fire unexplained--
rebel Flame rejecting reason,
elusive Emotion
bereft of name.

Hushed hands,
that loosed my shackles,
now hold me against my will.
Their grasp,
meek brush of monarch's wing,
hiding manacles of steel.

 

Cradling our ethereal flower,

my eyes grow soft

 and mild.

Feverish fingers pluck and tear,

emotions run thick

 and wild.

 

Last silken symbol

drifting serenely to the ground,

realization has its way.

My heart begins to pound.

 

Indentured slave to selfishness,

I clutch a cold and naked

stalk.

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Tabby Joy
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  • PoetryStar2
    April 14, 2008
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    this is good i really love the beginning


  • DrkPoet silver member
    March 11, 2008

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    Excellent write, I enjoyed the use of metaphors and the whole message that you've conveyed through out your words. I can't say that I liked one part of it more than any other because the entire piece was equally as good. Thanks for entering


  • Elenaliz
    February 28, 2008

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    I fear my eyes betray my past.
    My ravaged hands wide open,
    I refuse to let you go.
    Through jagged cracks in my defenses,
    guilty indulgence faintly glows
    i love this part the whole thing is really good.
    i love your choice of words and the title.


  • Elena95
    February 21, 2008

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    good write xx

    i like this i have to agree with the comment below.my favourite part is the last part. it stand out from he others.its a very clear poem. and is sharp and to the point
    well done x


  • Charity Ann
    February 20, 2008

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    I like this...I even like the background color. Umm...let's see...seems like in the 3rd stanza you are almost describing that tatoo of yours. I like it. I think my favorite part is the very last part. Although I really like all of it. I especially like the imagery, "silken symbol drifting serenely," "feverish fingers pluck and tear emotions run thick and wild," "within my frigid fortress burns a fire unexplained..." I like it all. There are so many contrasts. Good luck in the contest.

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