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Would rather be in a yellow submarine in the octopuc's garden with you (World is big and I am small)

A submarine circled around
the coffee cup
tipped for a sip
the ship rocked back and forth
as the coffee was placed
back on a sunlit table.

Executives looked from their

salt and pepper shakers,

at a land they could conquer.

Take from the tyranny of

A land with full of

Workers feeding the beast god,

egg in hole, wait...

shovel more egg in, wait...

and the men took their shirts off,

against regulations, but more comfortable.

They thought of the changes

that could be made to better conditions.

Executives stood up in preparations

to defend their kingdom.

The submarine surfaced for the

first time in minutes for

Her Majesty's message

"Stop daydreaming and leave

before you're late."

Author notes

I often sit and imagine my pen is a spaceship three miles long transporting people and supplies to outposts around the solar system while my teacher questions her own ability to teach a class.  I wish I could tell them it isn't their fault. Her Majesty could be any number of people, wife, mother, sister, aunt, grandmother. Ah well, I am just a daydreamer from the ground up. I think it might be to escape, like the submarine, staying below the surface of imagination to avoid the world working hard and fighting above. By the way, I love my girlfriend I believe "Her Majesty" is working in my best interest in this case.

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    March 6, 2008

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    Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.

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    whisper


  • quantumsurveyor
    February 22, 2008
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    A "Dali-esque" piece of skill that takes the reader roaming elsewhere and elsewhen giving free rein to the prompt in a satisfying way - "workers feeding the beast god " and then some eggs....nice one. This movement without let across an almost indefinable landscape is full of disturbing images. Well done in winning silver.

    • AaronReed
      February 25, 2008
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      Thank you. It was a very fun prompt to work with.

  • quantumsurveyor
    February 22, 2008

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    An existential/experiential trawl through mind blowing thoughts at the edge of reality - perhaps? Sadly I can't see that this can be squeezed into the prompt.

    • AaronReed
      February 22, 2008
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      It really wasn't meant to be an existential trawl through mind blowing thoughts at the edge of reality. It is the heart of not being bothered. When you are all that is important to you, and nothing you can do will change your world, there is a paradox to be solved. This paradox seems to be the subject reason for not being bothered to go to work, why it is so much more important to this other person than it is to the subject. Does it have to have the word "bother" in there?


      • quantumsurveyor
        February 22, 2008
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        No "bother" is not requireed - thought, is a "paradoxie" a lady of the night jumpng from a plane?


  • Haunting Whispers
    February 20, 2008

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    This is a very imaginative poem. I loved how it was personally made, like taking your own thoughts and laying them out, one by one. I enjoyed the creativity. Great work, glad I read it. Good luck in the contest.

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