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Cherry Blossums

Pink
    tumbles
      from April sky.
          Soft blossoms
            scatter
        from cool zephyr;
    under darkening sunlight,
  petals become
      transparent.
            Clinging desperately to
                  undaunted branches,
                      cherry blossoms
                            whimper at the
                      prospect of winter—
                            when white falls
                          instead of pink.





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  • Olivias Violin
    July 2, 2008

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    Very Good!

    Cherry blossoms are beautiful. I like the shape of this poem; also I like the ending.

    And you have challenged my vocabulary. I forgot what a zephyr was, so I had ti look it up in the dictionary, lol.

    Thank you for sharing this poem


  • Celticjedi
    March 2, 2008

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    I love cherry blossoms! You make them sound even more wonderful with your poem, if that's even possible. lol You did a great job. I wrote a poem about them too, it's called Sakura. Keep up the good work, good luck in the contest.
    ~Cj


  • GodsTrueSoldier
    February 21, 2008

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    =D very nice I love the way you captured teh beaty very impressed!

    Thanks a bunch for your entry!


  • Candy6
    February 20, 2008

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    This style of the poem is common. I've learning about different styles of poem titled "Poetry for the dummies." This style makes the poem to look beautiful. The imagery in this very good poem is beautiful.