You never once cared
You never once tried
You simply walked away
You simply denied!
I was left alone
Cold and blue
Do you see what
Love can do[?]
You had my love
My heart
My all
You through it back
I walked and wondered
What to do,
There was only one thing
It was leaving you!
Life without you
Is not a life for me
I love you so much
But I cant be with out a we
So grasping the razor
Small as it may be
Such a powerful tool
The best way you see
don’t worry dear
Its brand new
I bought it
As I was thinking of you.
Step in the room
As I whisper goodbye
Sit on the floor
To where I will die!
Maybe then you will see
All my heart was just for you
Maybe then you’ll understand
How much I needed and wanted you
But sad as it may be
My life will already be done
But to me it was dead when
I had to let you go..
So my dear no it did not hurt
When your already dead you cant feel a thing
The blood was just there
Though it may have been cold
I love you I swear
But this is my story yet told
A life with out you
Is not a life to me
No it did not hurt
The razor simply set me free..
Author notes
just to all my family and friend no i am not cutting or am i going to be it was in my head and so i put it down thanks for reading..
MCR"
A contest entry
- Emo/Cutting/Suicide by LostInTheDream.
500 points, ended March 18, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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wow great job!!!!
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i love this well done
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wow,I loved the last line and the poem itself,thank you for entering the contest!!!
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oh and good luck <3
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Love... Nothing but the cause of loneliness, hatered, and... death
death to the heart.
death to life
death to love.
Very well written...
Beautiful yet tragic.
Connects me to my current times too...
Life is nothign but a big pool of sorrows.
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Well Done,
A very good write for this contest!
Hope you do well, and best of luck!
Dad xo
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this aint great this is super duper fantastic i loved it u had my attention the whole way... i can realy relate to it.... keep up the gud work! oh yea i loved the way u started it was awosome...
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great
just what i was looking for, just how i feel, thank you for entering! -
This was a really good write. It's very passionate and dark. Good job, and good luck in the contest.
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