Hiding from the light
Eyes closed tight
He opened and saw the beauty
The faith and fresh breeze
He lived!
Author notes
So it if my first time writeing a poem like this sorry i gave it my all,and any helpful notes, comments or hints to improve do say so thanks xoxox
A contest entry
- NATURE PICTURE PROMPT INSPIRED 20 WORDS/ 20 POETS by Roaddog Wolf.
450 points, ended March 4, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Let me know what i could do to make this better...
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I struggle with the sorter writes as well, just keep doing them
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NICE thought and feeling, perhaps too many duplicated words good luck in the contest and thanks for your entry
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I like this...
surprise here is the most beautiful peice of nature
this beauty is one not to be capured but rather
injoyed...
Best of luck in the contest
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--kat -
Good job hun! short also, but powerful!
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sometimes simplicity is best
which is why i love this poem
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Excellent!
Such beautifully inscribed words underneath
lovely shade of blue. Thanks for being you, and sharing here.
Much love and light~
-Dad xo
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What a beautiful thought
for this picture prompt!
Well done and good luck
to you with it here.
Thanks a lot for sharing it!
Jeremy0826 -
It's a very pretty poem.
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That picture is stunning, and so is your write. You need not say your are sorry in your comments, be proud. Good luck.
Kelli
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