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my wings

one hit is all it takes

to knock me down put me back in my place,

i lye on the floor in a pool of blood

and pray to god thad you'd be done

you leav the room as i wipe my tears

I'v had to put up with you for to meany years

it may be hard but still I try

to teach my broken wings to fly

well what do you think

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  • Fallen forever silver member
    September 11
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    try correcting the spelling

    there's good potentail here
  • This is a powerful piece and I think if you corrected your spelling errors, it would add to the power this piece lets off.

  • I like it Alot!So much emotion! I could actually picture how yew felt!
    It sounds like you are proably really going through this....Are yew?
    Cause if yew are,Id love to talk about it with yew!
    Love,
    Hannah Homicidal<3
  • i like my poem but no ones leaving coments
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