my wings

one hit is all it takes

to knock me down put me back in my place,

i lye on the floor in a pool of blood

and pray to god thad you'd be done

you leav the room as i wipe my tears

I'v had to put up with you for to meany years

it may be hard but still I try

to teach my broken wings to fly

well what do you think

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By me, right now

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Lauren Noir
September 11, 2008
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try correcting the spelling

there's good potentail here
lowercase prelude
August 7, 2008

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This is a powerful piece and I think if you corrected your spelling errors, it would add to the power this piece lets off.
the-emo-you-love
May 8, 2008

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I like it Alot!So much emotion! I could actually picture how yew felt!
It sounds like you are proably really going through this....Are yew?
Cause if yew are,Id love to talk about it with yew!
Love,
Hannah Homicidal<3
- I-hope-im-not-alone
  August 22, 2008
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  i was 4 a while. but its getting soooo much better.thanks for the comment
I-hope-im-not-alone
March 7, 2008
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i like my poem but no ones leaving coments