crying child
from a mother's lap
a song
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soothing
whoa! this is an awesome haiku!!! -SLiCK
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a song- wow. This is be-you-tea-full. Love the haiku... this tells me about how even a child's cry is music to a mother's ears... this speaks of love.
Soothing; beautiful indeed.
- namita
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excellent
crying child
from a mother's lap
a song
hi Mariza - i love this haiku. there is a wonderful contrast between the crying child and the song. The images are well crafted combining two sounds and two images in only eight words. a superb haiku!
i see the child crying and then hear the mother singing a song to try to soothe the baby.
excellent,
myron.
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purrfit haiku - not that I'm a specialist, but from the little bit I learned about this form, I can say it's a good one ...
I love the way the song doesn't spring from the mother's mouth (what one expects), but from her lap ... reminds me of my singing lessons where I struggled to integrate any bodyparts lower than the chest in the experience ...
lovely, my friend,
mari-on (sometimes mari-off, when I'm in bad mood)
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You are funny You should use the on and off to let us know which mood you are
I like writing haiku, this one I wrote as assignment to Don's advanced haiku class. Still need to finish the other zillions more assignments, I'm skipping classes this weekend
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great idea : maybe I can create special avatars to put on my page, depending the mood ... today, I guess, I'm in a good mood, the lil girl without teeth seems to enjoy herself ...
by the way, thanksie for the course-info ...
I did chari's beginners-class, not sure if I'm sufficiently qualified for the masterclass ... -
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ah, forgot to mention, your were cute without teeth, looks like a brat. You still look cute by the way, don't go pull your teeth out
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I like Charish work, she has a great vision to haiku. Don is a wonderful teacher and has such a great ability to explain and edit haiku. You should give it a try, if you need any extra help, just yell hard or take the TGV to Antwerp
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so nice, makes me think a mother can hear and find such a different world than others, caring changes us..for the better i think...so very nice...PK
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every mother could relate to this...my daughter loves to be cradled...sometimes even in the very arly morn like 2am when i am so sleepy...my my knees are to weak to stand up to carry her to give her that rock a bye baby hush...
i love the concept of mother and child bonding expressed in haiku...
you are really so talented with it
Anna Lee
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You've regained a fan base, how cool, I like that, makes me feel good. So does the haiku btw. Not the crying part of course.
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I think it all depends how hard and long that baby's been crying
I would roar instead of sing a song
But that's my prerogative of being a gay
Whoohoooooo!!! No children
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Lovely!
The title ,'Soothing',is so apt for this lovely poem-a 'crying child',is anycase soothed just by simply sitting on his ,'mother's lap'-no matter what his woes are which his little cries express he knows they will be all resolved because he is in her lap-her soothing voice is his assurance
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Sitting safe in the rocking chair
Going forward, then back to there
Little creaks from off wood floor
blend with the song to make it more
Soothing cries from little lips
As momma rocks with bend at hips
So hush little baby cry no more
Soon you will go through sleeping door
Dream now baby, image sweet
As mom now rises to her feet
Put in cradle, gentle hands
Tiptoes quietly from sleepy land
Have a lovely week...shhhhhhhh...
Hugs...Eddy
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So Beautiful
What I always loved about haiku's the most is how shor tn sweet they are with so fe wof words and syllables and well add that to the incredible word play you can pack into a Haiku and its just awesome like you have done here. any ways excellent job relaying to us that a mother is tending to their child and its almost a Heavenly feeling surrounded this Haiku. keep up the good work -
I love this..so beautiful in its simplicity and in eight words you show and make us feel so much...lovely..
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My lullaby:
"Hush little darling don't you cry, momma's gonna poke you in the eye."
I remember as a kid feeling safe, thanks to my parents, primarily my mom...I felt like that nothing could hurt me, if I'd ever had kids I'd have given them that same sense of security, and for me, that's what your haiku evokes for me, those old feelings and never to be thoughts.
Next time it thunders sing me a song.
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awww, what great imagery this holds
and also deep emotion for there isn't
a stronger tie than a mother and
child. great job.
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