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What happens in Vegas stays in Vegas


He is the needles number one addict, getting tattoos one after another
His skin looks as if it been dipped in the assorted color box of crayola 
A back reciting tributes lead to his arms of revelations,
He could recite the psalms just by moving his arm to elevation
Artistry done in bereavement lead to his desolate wrist of "Hope"
RIP Linda Cirelli, was the secret method in helping him cope

He flaunts a blinding sleeve that carries a five thousand dollar clock
The Lord is crucified on his chest and dangled from a 24 inch platinum block

He pays top dollar to keep Versace blocking sun from his eyes
And maintains a connection to every new Air force 1 supply
Crusades on Infiniti wheels that reflect your expression
Clothing twinned to accessories for a lasting impression


Air flights to Vegas as if it's his second home
Spitting money from finger tips that leak Dom Perignon
Weekly Deposits at the Casino as he prays for much luck
Drops pay checks on the Queen of Hearts and suffocates in big bucks

Blackjack tables cut through his bank card with a gambling knife
Kayne buzzing in his mind,........"Welcome to the good life"
His thoughts are muffled by quarter's ricocheting off metal
Strobe lights gain his vision as smoke stained words try to settle


Savings bonds slip in the panties of the nights feature presentation
No need for rational thinking when your life's a vacation...............




Layne Cirelli 2007




Author notes

For my brother,(the one on the right )

-and for the record because everyone keeps asking, No, that is not me in the picture, my brother would never let his friends that close to me, lol

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  • lol...
    Well, that is awesome that you wrote a poem for your brother. It is very good! You have great talent...keep up the great work. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful write!!
  • dillpickle62
    March 2

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    Great Poem!

    Just cruz'in the AP site reading. Random picks this one brings back memories of my own Vegas nights. Thanks for sharing your humorous and creative talants right down to the Author Notes. Dill -


  • BermudaHighway
    February 26

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    This is fantastic. Seriously, I loved it from the title to the last ellipsis. Lots of awesome word play - "the needles number one addict." "A back reciting tributes lead to his arms of revelations."

    The rhyming and flow are liquid gold. Amazing, clear imagery. This piece is such a vivid portrait of someone that the reader can totally grasp, relate to, and is possibly embodied in ourselves or someone we know. You pull this off with such finesse - a graceful balance of questioning and compassion. It's hard to write about those we love truthfully, but you do so with a very objective vantage, allowing the reader to draw their own conclusions.

    Another awesome piece from Ms. Layne. Keep 'em coming!

    -Kate


  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 25

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    Perfect

    That about sums up so many souls I know.
    My friend has so many of these habits. It's sad.
    The good life eh, I wish that's what you can call it.
    Sad to me, very sad indeed. Much love sweet soul.
    This poem is excellent, well versed.

    -Timothy


  • ariosto gold member
    February 20

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    Layne, this is so damned good.
    It's unique, creative and the kind of nitty gritty I do like so much.
    A great character portrait in words.

    I have no tats myself but a jailhouse friend of mine taught me how in case I ever did 'hardtime' said it would make me a hero. He was kind, my grateful dead head on his forearm was sooooooo bad.

    This is good


    • Layne..
      February 21
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      Thank you so much, I am happy you enjoyed it.. He is quite the character, lol...

      -thats funny about the tats, and I agree you would need some if you ever did some "hardtime" lol... thanks for reading
      -Layne
  • nothinghere silver member
    February 20

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    Sometimes you gotta do what gets you through... it is a brilliant write... feels like a little sadness behind the words or maybe my imagination.... all the same a great write

    Karen


  • moluv10
    February 20
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    This is even hotter than the original! I love your wordplay as usual. Keep up the great work!


  • Swangrnv
    February 20
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    Hotter than before!

    My friend this is just plain badass! I LOVE THIS!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 20

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    Wow, decadently delicious Layne, a real treat indeed, great job!


    Love and peace,
    mj.

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