Is she a figment of your imagination,
or just a shadow of your former self?
Paper thin as parchment,
brittle.
Hurried excuses flit with
Butterfly agitiation,
on scattered thoughts.
Hidden are the dark swirls
that mind bends the subconscience,
apparitions of normality
jump forward, to take centre stage.
Willpower alone carries strength
to deceive,
once unsure,
now fixated.
She is dying slowly
in her self appointed tower,
unable to accept her limitations,
unwilling to change.
Magic mirrors for eyes,
she sees herself as an obelisque,
angular, uneven.
Nature sees her as a waif,
lingering on the web of life,
existing only in the figment
of her imagination.
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wow. That's all I can really say. My favorite stanza:
Nature sees her as a waif,
lingering on the web of life,
existing only in the figment
of her imagination.
It is beautiful, the piece in its entirety. The strength in the words is amazing and I loved it.
♥Caitie
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Thank you Caitie for your kindness
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This a most powerful and deeply satisfying poem on an edgy subject for some. Strange to use the word "enjoy" over a thoughtful piece like this but, there you go - I did enjoy it; and the strength of it made a change to many items on the site. Thank you, poet. Donald
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Many thanks Donald for your comments, as always, very much appreciated
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You did a fine job of capturing the hopelessness of this sickness. Most of the men I know like a woman to have somew meat on thier bones. I for one can not figure out the logic. My 18 year teen is struggling with this, she is not fat... I had no idea..Shes bin to seek help but privacy rules keep me in the darkand she does not want to dicuss it. A wonderful piece of work.rudolf
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I have to admire you for making the remark that "men like a woman to have some meat on their bones"...yes I agree but that being said, they also like to be seen with a size 6 model next to them
It is possibly these mixed messages that do most harm and also the "glossy mags" that never show models as being from size 6-18.
There are some amazing consultants out there who specialise in this dreadful condition, along with some other pretty awful eating disorders. I know you will lend your daughter all the support she needs in the best way you can and that is all anyone can ask. Let her know how much you are there for here and that her struggle is also your struggle. Be strong,
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I love this. It's realistic, and there isn't a clear solution in this poem. I went through it myself and dropped twenty pounds in less than three months.
I relate. I've read a lot of poetry on the topic that was cliche, or used unimaginative words, but this, this blew me away.
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Thank you for your kindness. Perhaps the biggest struggle is the oldest one and that being the recognition that there is a problem to start with. Once acceptance has been gained a whole world is out there waiting to help. It will seem an upward battle for many but help is out there. Be strong and it is possible to overcome.
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Haunting
One of the most haunting, yet real, poems I have ever read. This is a very disturbing problem which may have no solution. Terrific job.
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Thank you
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This is quite a wonderful poem, on quite a difficult subject too.
It's really a sad story...anorexia...very sad because so many of the girls that go to these extremes are so beautiful. It's sad...when curvy girls think they're fat when they pick up that magazine article with that flimsy model on the cover. (Curves make us women, right?)
Very brilliant words you have.
Síochán leat
~Mairèad~
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Isn't this true. Many girls think that something is wrong with them (especially if they aren't popular or well liked by guys) and blame it on being fat. I don't know many people who are able to look in the mirror and not find at least one flaw that 'ruins' them. I've even been guilty of this myself on occasions...it's better to just focus on what IS pretty about us than what could make us prettier.
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i really like this poem. it is very.. deep.
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Wow! I loved the line,"she is dying slowly in her self appointed tower." So many times we wonder what people think about us and then try to fit into that mold, when all the time it's what we think about ourselves that really drives us. This is very well done and full of truth and honesty. thanx, conni
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Excellently written piece!
Hello dear friend, you wrote this piece so well that I want to be jealous of it. Truly a wonderful write that all truly skinny people should read. I really love every word of it my friend.
Damon
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Thank you my friend...the sad thing is that the ones who look in the mirror, that are really skinny, never see themselves as thin. They see a grossly overweight sad apparition
Hence the constant war to get thinner. Many thanks for your support
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Wow.
This is one of the strongest
poems I've ever read,
because what has been said here is real,
sadly it is.
And we can only hope
and pray for these to see that they are perfect
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Those who think themselves too fat, will starve themselves till they are paper thin, and even then want to lose some more weight. Like how you wrote this; sentiments well expressed in these lines. Good flow and strong message shared. Interesting picture used - very contemplative mood.
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Thank you Grannyeri...
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that poem is really cool...its powerful and subtle and the same time...very cool
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Many thanks for your kindness
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I liked reading this. The words sound pretty, but the image they convey isn't. I liked that about it most.
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Pretty words often hide a multitude of problems. I am glad you delved deeply
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SO LOVELY
I like it. Its HARDCORE cool!
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Thank you
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Ok....
I like it, if it wasn't for the tital I wouldn't be sure what it's about.
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Lol..Thank you Ana
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The entire time I read this, I thought of my best friend Brittany. She's been struggling with anorexia for a while and she's just now starting to look better. Thank you for putting it on the featured list... I probably wouldn't have seen it otherwise. It's beautiful and it definitely needs to be read.
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I am delighted that your friend is on the road to recovery. Anorexia is an ongoing problem that needs to be kept in the limelight. Sufferers need to be attentive at all times as it is very easy to slip back into bad habits. Your friend is lucky to have such a caring friend
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This poem is very raw, and especially for me. It struck a personal cord. Thanks for sharing it.
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The cord it struck was intentional I also have to remind myself that what I see in front of me is of my own imagination, rather than fact. Thank you for your kindness, as always, very much appreciated
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i like it! it was very dark and personal keep keep up the good work
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Thank you, I will
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It's a very pretty poem on a not-so pretty subject, and the irony in that makes me laugh. Probably shouldn't.
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Thank you Jasper for your comments, I am not sure if laughter is what I was expecting, but I suppose any sort of response can only be a good thing.
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a very good poem "that mind bends the subconscience," into what 'we want/wish to see/believe' the title and first stanza were great thanks for sharing regards zaj
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Thank you for reading
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Bookmarked
This poem is just amazing. The title attracted me to it and wow...
"Willpower alone carries strength" was great, and the entire first stanza, too.
An amazing poem, capturing what so many people go through silently everyday. Amazing write!
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You are most kind with your comments thank you
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You know
Perhaps you should place this poem on the feature page. It may be a life saver to some. Gofor it my friend. It needs to be read
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Ok my friend...if it helps just one it will be worth it.
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Hope you're enjoying the day on the frontpage It deserves it
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Wow, I have never had to send so many replies in all my time here at A.P Now I have to get round to repaying the compliment
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Excellent
An excellent composition --well versed and descriptive
--I particularly like the wording in the 2nd stanza.
Well Done!!
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Thank you Glad you enjoyed it
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Amazing
Wonderful write. Words well chosen with a flow that is rich and full, so fluid in it's movement. Well done. This was an absolute pleasure to read.
*Go with God* my friend,
Valerie
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Thank you for your support my friend
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