slick, snappy, quick ... all:
and mortality turns immortal
the last-minute keen-witted
cannot wait to be acquitted!
Author notes
Structure: 4 lines (Quatrain)
Prompt: Immortality ... Grin: Who out there can beat my impatience to be set free as an immortal soul?
A contest entry
- Quickie, Quickie *oogle* by Tirrell.
375 points, ended February 20, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Witty!
Witty! I love this. I really like short ones. Very few of mine are long but very few are this short either. When we write really short ones, if we aren't careful they lose something. This one didn't, and that is a good thing.
Damon
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Awareness is the vehicle of our soul. Some may believe they've been around quite extensively, but they never moved at all. You, on the other hand, visited many places and times that few have seen. Your vehicle is powered by Light, precious soul. Ack,
Chris
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Now this is 'good' thinking on a prompt so deep. Well you have gone overboard, but I agree with each inch of the way. Having 'seen' death, and although I am human [and in all honesty still emotionally attached to life until He takes it], I do have this uncanny feeling of wanting to experience it. So, if called up know, I am ready [but I would like to come back for a chat to express my feelings on paper or with someone such as you]. Now I am getting carried away. Thanks for the poem and which it [quickly] took me! Frans
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please be patiet sweet poetess.. your work is not yet done here. there are some of us who need your kind encouragement.
very catchy swift meaningful poem! all in his time.
many blessings and *stomps
best of luck in the contest!
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Ah YES. All in his Time ...
it is a reassurance, mostly, dear poetic therapist!
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His time is not our time, still I understand the impatience. This has a lively rhythm and pretty rhymes.
check spelling in last line.
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Ah, My Editor!
You are to me a Muse so clever and so talented. Thank you for being the cautious eye to spy my agile errors ...
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oh wow this is very catchy a great write!
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Thank you for your comment!
I always stand in awe when I think about death: being totally renewed and IMMORTAL in a wink of an eye ... literally! After a lifetime of strife ... at last acquitted!
I am the mother of five children, by natural birth, and what always astounded me, is the IMMEDIATE and ABRUPT ceasing of pain and the the overwhelming joy after my precious babies were born ... Immortality is inside us already ... but will be perfected in Rejuvenating Afterlife.
Thank you for your comment, Poetess.
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Awesome!
Enjoyed this short verse sweet soul!
Very potent, and to the point!
All the best within the contest sweet soul!
-Timothy
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Quickies in Poetry ...
makes me breathless and impatient ... I write them without thinking ... LOL So I call it my all agogs.
Thank you for your comment, Timothy.
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