Down the river hidden in woods
Falls in great, rushing majesty
Symphony
Hear the thunderous, awesome call
Watch the curtain of blue and white
Nirvanic
A contest entry
- 2 of 13 Challenges [Invite Only]. by Naridill.
650 points, ended February 27, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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likes the images and simple words you used to captue your scene.
i didnt feel the emotion there was none I thought the movement was wrong for a poem about smooth flowing water ty getting your words to rolloff the tongue and really make a reader dwell on your words. and for ea poem has an ending that makes me ant to go wow with yours I had to pick up a dictionary lol. simple is bst it makes great effects.
but a great poem but it could use in honesty a second edit.
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Well this is an excellent little poem.
I myself don't do contests, or challenges, I can't seem to write like that. I have to feel a thing in order to write about it. You my friend are a very gifted writer, and a very special one as well. You write so much more maturely than your age is. You have a beautiful way of writing. This little poem is an excellent painting in words. You write an entire different way than I do. I hope you keep writing, very nice indeed. Connie
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Simple, short and sweet. A nicely penned effort in counting syllables. Very effective.
Thanks for entering,
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