leaf-sprung diatribe released –
a one-wing skin god flown far away,
bashfully landing square against a
level hill, grown over in heaven’s sunlight.
a shotgun feast tilting two garter towns
into rainbow ribbon week for the
gruff and the sleek to abide by –
that impish look won’t grace a lick
of naked delight here.
no novel similarities can be mistaken –
just a cross-legged prodigy with
scapula mounts waiting for the wide
spread extension of a permanent
gaze into ecstasy’s own eyes.
Author notes
when one fountain gives off, another one dries out...
A contest entry
- Innocence or Decadence... ??? by Ithica.
2050 points, ended February 20, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ok I just need to stop clicking return favor... And go directly to your page... Maybe once out of dozens of clicks it give me something I haven't read yet!!! Mr. Golden Boy!!!
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Hey there , Eduardo the wonder poet, you just proved yourself again - because you sure do have me wondering at times
Best to keep me guessing and on my toes,
galfalfa
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congrats, sweet Eduardo Well deserved, and I will get back to you...love, lane
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To be honest I had to call the possee! I have been taking trips around the moon with this one for hours and hours... Then I realized the poem had sent me on a trip through every imaginable emotion of what love is, and left hope at Cupids feet. This has it ALL in the most absract sense from bitterness, deviance, lust unadultrated innocence, and a measure of hope... Isn't love grand??? Thank-you for this mind blowing entry... I really mean that as I can't get it out of my head!!!
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Lucky describes my impressions well...
you voice this as matter of fact and
leave perspective up to the reader.
Excellent take on the prompt, I could not
have done better. Unique talent shows in
every line. Blue
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I must say that this is one of the most alluring and interesting pieces I have read in a very long time. There is a mystery to your poem... there is luster in that. I loved that you wrote as if your point was clear... and forced the reader to dwell over each and every phrase. AWESOME! I think that you should steal the gold in this contest. It is a picture of innocence... and your words are well crafted and used with a perfection that can not be easily spotted. It can be confusing... and yet clear as water. I believe that poetry is not always to be understood in detail. Poetry is to be mysterious... and this poem is that. I am adding you... just to see what else boils beneath the tip of that pen... incredible piece!
MEl
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i give this tuna half sandwiches...
you have a unique mind and poetic voice my friend
al
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