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Dance On, Giselle

Mississippi Delta shines like a diamond
In the heat of the day so warm
Like a woman's lovin' arms
O so warm

And a soul can't go wrong
When she smiles so sweet
Her lips are to simply die for
Her angel eyes make me fly

So dance for me, dance those blues away
She moves like a smoky haze
And Giselle can, O yes she truly can
She can dance those blues right away

If there's anything worth more than a woman's touch
It would cost more than all the heartache and tears
And we can laugh 'til the well runs dry
Take one last kiss before the goodbyes

So dance for me, dance those blues away
She moves like a smoky haze
And Giselle can, O yes she truly can
She can dance those blues right away

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Comments

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 30

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    This is a pretty cool write, such a smooth flow you have. Congrats on all your trophys. It was a pleasure to read.


  • Magik Milk Glass
    April 27
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    Wow i love love love this well done


  • MysteriousWhisper
    April 1
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    this is like a song. i almost started singing it in my head as i read it! lol. great job!


  • DancingQueenAngi
    February 24

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    Great write! You created a wonderful dance-like movement through out the piece! Very up beat!

    Thanks!
    ~Angi

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    For me, this reads like lyrics - in that sense the subtle repetition works well here.

    As lyrics, I do believe they are quite catchy


  • ASmileForYou
    December 9, 2008

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    Awww.. this is so cute and quaint! Thank you for entering! This is a realy good write!


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Thank you for your beautifully worded entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • delightfulmess silver member
    September 19, 2008

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    WOW!!!!!
    These are sensational lyrics
    Really enjoyed this. I can imagine the acoustic for this.

    Thank you for entering my contest.



    Delila


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Luminescence
    March 17, 2008

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    I am going to be quick commenting on the rest of the pieces because of the abundance of entries in my contest and it would take too long to judge this contest if I didn’t, so here is your score….

    Title- 9
    diction- 10
    syntax- 10
    wowness factor- 9
    Total- 38, nice score

    Thank you so much for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
    ~luminescence


  • Shancy Fayre
    March 17, 2008

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    Thank you for this entry and your participation. Good luck. Your score is: Title:9 Diction:7 Syntax:8 Wowness factor:7 Total:31. Shancy.


  • Ms Raneika
    March 15, 2008
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    Beautifully written piece...

    Love, Raneika


  • girl shaman
    March 1, 2008

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    definatly sounds like a song but i loved the imagery; it was very soothing & i just really liked reading this! thank you so much for entering


  • Love-Lee
    February 23, 2008

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    This was inspiring

    Beautiful... Such a way to look at a woman! I loved it you must tell me what your inspiration was!!! Of course you have to wait until the contest is over! Up until now I thought of Giselle as an evil twin sister, but that was because of a series of books I had read by V. C. Andrews... Lol! Well like I said great write!!!

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