I'm lost in the distance
pulling at your hidden call.
Streaming through
this endless twilight
Dreaming in the hidden cove;
Asking forgiveness
for holding you up so high
on your ethereal pedastal.
And I can't grasp
the hold you had on my reality
while we were all alone.
The one thing I know is...
You don't need to
waste your mind on me
Author notes
From an old unused account. Revised, posted for the same reasons as others I've posted recently.
Pic found at: http://poerti.deviantart.com/art/Love-Is-Dead-In-Metropolis-61922264
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Great write Angel,
It is crazy the kind of control one has over our thinking when our hearts are cover our eyes and controlling our brain. Sometimes we are guilty of convincing ourselves as much as they are. Things that are too good to be true, yet they hold no weight to our logic, damn logic anyway lol. This is a really great write, I wouldn't change a thing
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good
Loved it. I liked the end
"The one thing I know is...
You don't need to
Waste your mind one me"
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Great Job
Hope you're in a better place now! A strong poem... well said
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I am definately in a better place. Thank you for the comment
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it's sad and dark, but well written. You did a fantastic job. "I'm lost in the distance
pulling at your hidden call" what a fantastic beginning. keep up the awesome work
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this one is definetly darker than your other pieces but is still great. I would like to see this broken up into two stanzas but other than that the piece is great
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The thrall of unrequitted love hurts like no physical pain ever.
Yor poem makes me daydream the dreams I wish not to dream anymore, but it is a great poem none the less.
-cheers
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