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&& Her balance is off, clumsy is the biggest of understatements.

She fell for you && all you did,
was offer her more && more umbrella madness.
She was using you as an umbrella,
coz baby, it's raining, raining--
'Ooh, baby it's raining'
Someone should of told her that you
weren't gonna be her umbrella-ella-ella.

Don't call me baby, or babe,
don't call me sweetie or sunshine...
Better yet, don't call me at all.
You made my heart s_k_i_p over the normal process
of beating. I got lost in your smile,
&& fell through your eyes.
You were just faking though.
You don't need to worry about me
anylonger sweetie,
you don't care, so don't comment.

I may have you held-- stuck fast in a
hurricane of uncomfortable emotions
&& awkward silences && ESC won't help you
now baby.
No-ones gonna help you now.
Yet, perhaps you should have thought to care, to feel, to show a piece of fucking emotion.
No?
Doesn't float your boat sweetie?
Oh.. okie..

Yet, this wildcard girlie, isn't your
baby no more, she won't back down when you want her to.
She never should have.
She's gonna continue to chase sunshine smiles &&
rainbows, && maybe she'll pretend she never met you.
Maybe, she'll go back to wearing her heart♥
on her sleeve.

Okie now baby,
[repeat.repeat] after me...
Somewhere inside me, there is a fucking heart
Somewhere inside me, there is feeling--
Somewhere inside me, there's... there's...
there's nothing baby.

As lovely as you are;
I think perhaps, you're void of emotion
&& feeling. Maybe you don't agree.
But I knew you inside out.
Maybe you don't agree.

Maybe--
I don't know you so well at all.
Maybe--
You were wasting all of your fucking time
-on me.
Maybe...

We'll never know baby,
Yet, this rainbow chasing, sunshine smiling,
colourful skittle whore--
Well, baby, She's done avec vous.

Author notes

Okie sweetie, This is a little rubbish, but i hopes you likes it [=

I used option one [=
♥clumsy
♥umbrella madness
♥Better yet, don't call me at all
♥ESC, won't help you now
♥repeat
♥You were wasting all of your fucking time

I also used quote from umbrella- Rihanna [=

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  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    July 28, 2008

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    Beautifully written! ^-^ Your use of words is simply wonderful. Simply amazing piece. =] Awesome write.


  • forbidden-colour
    March 24, 2008

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    "
    Okie now baby,
    [repeat.repeat] after me...
    Somewhere inside me, there is a fucking heart
    Somewhere inside me, there is feeling--
    Somewhere inside me, there's... there's...
    there's nothing baby."

    I like the chanting you used in this, like a determination to show someone how you feel although they appear to be ignorant towards your pain.
    Oooh, this is amazing

    Well done sweety.
    x


  • LucyLightning
    February 21, 2008

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    i really liked the beginning, twas my favorite part.
    it was cute.

    I really enjoy the cuteness of this poem
    There were a lot of memorable lines in it as well.

    =DDDD


  • JulietteArielle
    February 20, 2008

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    This is beauuuutiful, not rubbish!! Way to go girlie. ♥
    Favorite lines: [repeat.repeat] after me...
    Somewhere inside me, there is a fucking heart
    Somewhere inside me, there is feeling--
    Somewhere inside me, there's... there's...
    there's nothing baby.


    • over the rainbow--x
      February 20, 2008
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      Thanks sweetie [=
      I'm glad you like it [=
      finally realised that he's an idiot && i'm better off without him.

      thanks for the commentlove && clappymen


  • whiterabbit.
    February 19, 2008

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    I love this sweetie. It's wonderful, just like you. I love how much emotion there is in this. The wording that you used is just perfect. Amazing job bby.

    I hope you're doing okies. Talk soonly?


    • over the rainbow--x
      February 20, 2008
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      I'm doing better baby [=

      I'm over tommy, t is for twat lol
      I'm kinda, idk, with alex now, && he's loverly, though we're taking it slowww, very slow && very careful.

      How are you sweetie?
      Hows your mouth?

      Ily


  • WishMeAway--x
    February 19, 2008

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    x-speechless--x


    bookmarked.

    baby idk what to say. this is perfect.

    like glitter&&glue

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