Imperfection.
Unforgiving deities.
Beauty,
A dove on fire.
Destroying the harmony;
Burn away the scars.
Callous beings,
Turn to me.
I do not fear you.
Mock my inadequacy
Do not insult my perception.
I laugh at your anger,
Though my flaws do not cause YOU pain,
You take offense to my deadened senses.
What cruel soul doomed me to this?
My pain, their diversion.
My torment, their amusement.
I am not smiling,
I groan under the weight of your gift.
It is a curse.
I must thank you.
For my hardened spirit;
If I am to be whole.
Time,
Will tell.
I may forgive.
Author notes
So this basically is talking about how people think you need to be all accepting, and if your not beautiful thats fine, but you still know better; you know that people look down on you.
So this explains my name and me all in one! (username = dead imperfections )
I'd like to be the purple pet turtle if at all possible XD
A contest entry
- In Search of an AP Familyy!!! by With Broken Wings.
300 points, ended April 20, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just tell me what you think.
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i love it! very good poem thanks for entering.. Sure u can be my purple pet turtle!! welcum to the fam!
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LOVEEEE ITTTTTTTT
My pain, their diversion.
My torment, their amusement.
Loved These Lines, I felt as if i was in your mind and everything that you wrote passed through your mind and you wanted to tell it to the peeps..that ARE so jusgemental
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thanks very much for the comment!
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These lines were great:
"Though my flaws do not cause YOU pain,
You take offense to my deadened senses."
I was initially confused by the line "I must thank you" but I suppose you meant it sarcastically. Great write! -
Hmmm
Just my thoughts, but in the place of grim resolve, why not try comedy or sarcasm ? Afterall, you can only communicate if you speak other people's language. People, i believe, judge based on values, so insult those values here and there. Other than that, its ok, i think. -
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thanks for the comment.
I usually DO respond with sarcasm.. it was just I felt in the mood for a depressingly serious poem the day I wrote this
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People are always going to have something to say. I dont' care if you're the most beautiful person ever. People are just stupid that way (some people), just keep rockin who you are, and you're poem rocks!
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thanks
YAh I don't really care THAT much usually..but I was kinda annoyed when i wrote this
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i liked this unique style. although i had to read the note before i realized what exactly the poem was about, but i'm kinda slow anyway.
the lines "My pain, their diversion." and "My torment, their amusement." are really good because they show how you feel, then how others who judge you feel.
great work! -
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thanks you ever so muchly for the comment!
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