They met
at the intersection-
a collision
of polar opposites,
a mixture
of volatile emotions
preparing to intermingle.
But rather than
neutralizing each other,
their bonds were broken:
a miscalculation
in chemical certainty
where they dissociated
instead of combined.
One was unwilling
to change his properties
in spite of the efforts
of the other
to excite attraction.
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A contest entry
- Originality With Meaning by The Slant.
525 points, ended February 29, 2008, 26 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i really like this. it leaves the reader wondering how it relates to you until the last stanza. really well thought out, cool concept.
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Ooh, I like the chemical reaction in this one
you pretty much leave me speechless each time you come up with something 
lol 
Leander
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An interesting use of the word 'neutralize'... I like it. I know it's not written, but I saw a man in a suit, swimming in the bay. And he leaps out of the water like a dolphin onto the dock but as he does he's all dry.
I love it.. well played
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Wow!! I love this!! Definitely a great metaphor. You have definitely turned this into an artform!!
"One was unwilling
to change his properties
in spite of the efforts
of the other
to excite attraction."
This stanza was my favorite! There was just so much depth to it, and so much to be read into...it could be interpretted many ways, but I think you penned it the way it should have been. Very nice write, as always!
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a wonderfully written write with a great flow, i love all of the chemical references, and the way the poem flows so well. a wonderful piece
lucy
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Wow this is penned so well!
a miscalculation
in chemical certainty
where they dissociated
instead of combined
was my fav stanza! -
this is awesome... wow.. it made me smile for some reason, even though the truth of it makes my heart ache. i think it's your style and use of metaphors.
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Very interesting, I like it
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