in the shadow
of a praying mantis
scent of a rose
In a list
A contest entry
- ~ Haiku ~ A contest for all Winklings & their Friends #54 by Lyndon.
1000 points, ended March 1, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This haiku appeals to sight and smell, very nice! Congratulations.
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congrats
Hi Susie - congratulations on your award. this one could very well have won as well, in my reckoning. it's a wonderful haiku! -
A beautiful haiku
I feel as if I have just gone into my garden. Rose-blooming time. You have come over all summery, friend.
What an Aha! moment and contrast: the scent of the rose shot right up my nostril, unexpectedly. From insect shade to powerful rose vapours!
Excellent haiku!
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Very Nice
So I comment n your works again for haikus Azure85
Getting back to your Haiku I really like this alot. I love your soft wording through out this poem but even more so I really liked how you incorporate a preying mantis into the picture as it really unraveled wonders in my hand. any ways nice work and keep it up
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This holds two powerful images,
one is the praying mantis and
the other is the scent of a rose.
what an interesting read this is
with those two in it. great job
on this, I really enjoyed it.
good luck in the contest.
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This is quite subtle - I notice the scent of a rose only when my nose is almost in it, and maybe I should not be so close! There is a lot of contrast in the two images, very interesting! Good luck.
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lovely
Hello there, Susan!
What an awesome haiku! I don't know what to think, but I like it a lot. I think that's coz the first two lines are what the poet sees and the third line is what the poet smells. That's a wonderful way to write a haiku - mixing the senses like that.
This is a fine example of haiku where every word in it is needed for one reason or another. It sure puts to shame all those haiku i see where the poet has crammed in as much information as possible in 17 syllables.
Good luck in the contest & have a gr8 day,
BJ.
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Wow...this is an awesome haiku, at least in my opinion. I am just learning them, I took the class. I might not be great, but I know what I like. I hope it does well in the contest.
Kelli
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