Life,
Nothing but a box of chocolates,
it all tastes sweet,
yet all so bitter,
some crunchy,
some smooth.
You'll never know what you'll get,
Sir,
I tell you.
I kid you not,
this poem is true,
I surely hope,
it means something to you.
I hope you get,
And understand,
this cute lil poem,
which is not a command.
In con conclusion my children,
As you already can see,
Life is like a box of chocolates,
for you,
and,
for me.
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A contest entry
- Bubble Kisses by im only half empty.
1050 points, ended March 6, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I know it dont rhyme, is it ok?
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Thats soooooo true! *nods*
GOOOD GOOOD no...GREAT poem!!!
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*wow*
actually, you seened to rhyme very well, but maby taking out the commas and punctuation would make it flow a little better. just a thought:-) anyway way to go!! loved it!
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yay!
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a itssweet i like it
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Well, poetry doesn't have to rhyme...so, that part is okay.
I don't like how there is a space between every line. Perhaps stanzas would work nicely? If you would like help with stanzas please feel free to ask.
"Life,
Nothing but a box of chocolates.
It all tasts sweet,
Yet all so bitter."
You don't need a comma after every line...use your punctuation just like you were writing a sentence. It'll give it a smoother read.
Keep writing.
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~cough cough~ I prefer the way I write... thanks.
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I like this very much! It's rue that life is like a box of chocolates because, as you said, you never know what you are going to get.
I hope this wins something good!
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