Dew drops on web
sun stretches over hills
to rescue drowned spider.
A contest entry
- ~ Haiku ~ A contest for all Winklings & their Friends #54 by Lyndon.
1000 points, ended March 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nice images! There is an interesting personification in giving the sun intention.
You have contained a whole hour in a few words.
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This is a precious moment
dear poet. A fine poem where my imagination plays.
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Smiling at the spider and fine haiku for him to love.
Admire the imagine of the dew on web and sunshine. 
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Spider
Hello there!
I love the way that spider crawls across the top of the haiku and escapes.
I like this haiku very much and I think you've done a great job. You could change drowned to drowning, because drowned means dead and a dead spider can't be rescued. That's my thinking about it anyway, for you to use or lose.
Excellent work, otherwise!
Have a spiderful day,
BJ.
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Hi, many thanks only problem rules in haiku say no ing words lol, well if you drown you can be brought back if someone works quickly enough,Di
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ing
Hello again! Yes - brought back quickly, LOL.
No ing words? Wow, i haven't heard that one. It makes sense though I suppose as a haiku tries to capture one moment and verbs ending in ing denote an ongoing moment.
Oh dear - so much to learn!
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a unique image you have penned
here. And the spider was an
interesting touch. good luck
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Clever, cute and very enjoyable. Excellent haiku.
Bill
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Sorry, forgot the applause.
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crystaldust 19-02-08 22:15
Very neat. Still doesn't make me like spiders though. mlj -
I love the spider walking across the top of the poem, it's cute, the imagery is perfect!
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VERY CUTE!!!!
I can close my eyes and see this web with dew drops on it and the morning sun just peeking up over the horizon.
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Oh, I love this! Speedy Spider and all! Poor lil' o' eight legged creeper blessed by the sun's rays as it's saving grace.Fab Haiku!
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Oh my gosh, I almost freaked at that spider...
You wrote an awesome haiku to go with it as well. Good luck in the contest.
Kelli
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