the muscles streched taughnt
makes my breath catch
The fluid motion
makes me sigh
O how I wish I could fly
Fly like that
The wildness
the freedom
it all amazes me
O I wish the world could see
see the beauty
The heart and soul
all right there in the open
Like a picture of perfection
can you see the obsession
glowing in her eyes
as she reaches for the sky
Plain beauty
Naked beauty
out there for all to see
yes that's a horse running free
Author notes
About My Baby Jill... my horse
A contest entry
- Everyday Beauty....... by GodsTrueSoldier.
550 points, ended March 4, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Hmmm tell me what you think?
Comments
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Absolutely beautiful, imagery and feeling. Loved it! Theres nothing like watching a horse run with all of their beauty and strength.
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ooooooo that is really good. and the way u described it i could have never seen a horse running and still have pictured it
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=D very nicely done!!! I personally dont liek horses too much, perhaps because never really learnt how to ride one, but I liek thsi entry alot, because I cant explain it, but your words captured me, I could see what you where talking about I could feel the passion you felt about your horse 'Bbay Jill'
and more than that I could see beyond it the freedom that she must have,and as you said 'can you see the obsession
glowing in her eyes
as she reaches for the sky' It was just amazingly done.
Thank you so much for entering! -
wow, this is as the contest says every beauty, you did a great job on this poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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