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Alternate ending

I pushed through letters and tripped over sentences
Just to make it to
familiarity
Life once suited in comfort now stripped and teased
with new faces and dreams
Promises used to shower my future
until
the stone my plan was set in
began to crack
I watched memories dress up and fly away in
disguise
old paths planned there escapes as they fled
the scene that I was hostage to
Tears conjoined as they ran down my cheeks
in a race to freedom
Times that were stored in my mind began to
whisper “goodbye”
I followed the path I was sent to take
but
my heart spun at the end of the road
and split in two like an intersection of life
Your smile hypnotized my direction
and your voice spoke magnetic tones as it
slowly unfolded my new plan.
I dropped what was left of me in your palm
and
I sank into your footsteps making new prints

just my size
Risk took me by the hand led me to the end of the
“One Way” road you built for me.

 

 

 







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  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 25

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    Awesome.

    Loved it from start to finish!
    Thanks for sharing your talent here.
    The last lines made it complete, you sure can write.
    All the best within this contest!

    -Timothy

  • nothinghere silver member
    February 19

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    As always you got this one and knocked it on it's rear, perfect hun, not much more can be said, soft, gentle and completely you, goodluck in the contest

    Karen


  • Layne..
    February 19

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    Thank you very much for your kind words, I am pleased tro see you liked it
    -Layne

  • chrisl1360
    February 19
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    Amazing!

    Loved they way you worded everything and the imagery written. Soooo good!! Great job!

  • moluv10
    February 19

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    "i watched memories dress up and fly away in disguise" That line hit me hard layne. I really love this. Your wordplay is excellent! Great take on the pic. It's always a pleasure to read your wonderful work. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Dygurl
    February 19
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    i really like this, you have an amazing way with words. Nicely done.

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