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Hurt

I will let you down
[i will make you hurt]
im full of broken dreams
[you will to turn to someone else]

the only thing that comes through
[this fogged and forgotten mind]
is the pain
[mentally unprepared to say good-bye for the last time]

you could have it all
[my empire of dirt]
what have I become?
[my sweetest friend]

everyone i know
[goes away in the end]
everyone i love
[goes away]

i kissed you good-bye
[but it could never be enough]
to see you again
[or hear you, be near you]

 

i will let you down

[i will make you hurt]

the familiar old sting

[of letting you down]

 

you are someone else

[im still here, tired and forgotten]

if i could start again

[without knowing you, would i take that chance?]

 

i focus on the real thing

[the pain, the only thats real]

the familiar sting

[try to kill it all away]

 

the feelings disappear

[against the test of time]

i let you down

[i let you hurt]

 

i will found a way

[to make you proud of me]

i know you hurt

[but im lost without you]

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

 I love this song, it makes me happy and sad at the same time. I went with him and my own feeling on this. I used the lyrics many times. And I could of posted the lyrics, though it couldnt match the feeling the music gave, but it could show the feelings I am trying to convey. Now after you have listened to it. I felt an unbelievable sadness, when I knew he didn't write the song. I just had to get this out. And I'm not saying it to be all "its all about him". Feelings like this could be conveyed about any age, if written right.

I hope you enjoyed, and I hope it made you think of something that has you feel this way before. I beleive, this poemage could just be another piece of crap. But even if so, try and relate before you "diss" me about. It's real, non"emo, cut cut cut" emotion. 

I know its not my best, though I dared to say it, I do think its better than my usual whiny things.

I would love to hear your voice on the matter.

And this is my most serious poemage to date. And its not directly at love.

 

Ask me if you have ANY questions, I dont mind :] 

 

Trent Reznor Wrote This Song. 

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  • lucy sky-diamond
    February 20

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    you've incorperated the lines of the poems really well with the lyrics, this is a very powerful, emotional write

    lucy


  • Perception
    February 19
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    You stole the lyrics from NINE INCH NAILS' song Hurt "I will let you down
    [i will make you hurt]"

    Yes. Trent Reznor wrote hurt. Don't let anyone tell you otherwise. He wrote it for Johnny Cash to sing.

    I don't really like how you took those lyrics, AND the title... It just kinda made me mad that you would do such a thing. But, I will get over it. I suppose. Because I can't really do anything about what people steal and what they don't.

    This isn't a bad poem/lyric w/e. It really had some great emotion in it and had some good lines....

    ~Nice write.

    • GlowstickOfLove
      February 19
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      I know, and *actually* they both sung the song.

      And I didnt steal. I gave credit, though its not to NIN.

      • Perception
        February 19
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        I know they both sang it. NIN wrote it.

        ~ Ok... No steal w/e

        • GlowstickOfLove
          February 19

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          But I never said NIN wrote it.

          And thank you.
          I dont like being falsely accused.

          Pleh. Its just a bad day, eh?

          • Perception
            February 19
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            I was simply saying instead of giving credit to Johnny Cash (who simply sang it) you should probably give credit to the actual song writer. Trent Reznor of Nine Inch Nails.

            I was not trying to falsely accuse you. I am sorry.

            • GlowstickOfLove
              February 19
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              :]
              Sorry, I took it out on you.

              Hah, feels like a "Barney" moment :]
              Thanks, Sorry I got angry.

              • Perception
                February 19
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                Heh. Well I just get really defensive about people saying things about Johnny Cash & Hurt. Thinkin he's a genius for it and what not. When it was really Trent... who... is... a... genius...

                Don't worry about it

                • GlowstickOfLove
                  February 19
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                  I never said he was genius. lol
                  He just made the song slower, and it had a better feel [for me at least]

                  :]
                  Boy, im getting all sorts of heat for this.

                  • Perception
                    February 19

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                    Well I was just saying... I never said you said he was.... =] I just like correcting people on their music theory.

                    I think johnny cash sounds like he's dead.... hehehehe...

                    • Uhs Feth Malorn
                      February 19
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                      Johnny Cash was dying when he sang that song, and the death of his wife had a profound impact on his life anyway. Yes, it was a cover, but there are very few songs more beautiful than that cover.

                    • GlowstickOfLove
                      February 19
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                      lol :]
                      Well Thanks
                      Glad we got this sorted out. :]
                      and thats some of the ONLY songs I like from him.

                      may he not come back from the grave and eat me.
                      lol

  • abuyi
    February 19
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    i love this song hurt by Johnny cash.. the song is about life and personal experiences,, the tiresome side of life..i could feel you but i dint like how you turned this all in love .."i know you hurt
    [but im lost without you]"..
    beside this i could feel what you convey.. this is a result of mixed emotions that are triggered by this song. well you used the essence of the song in this write..



    • GlowstickOfLove
      February 19
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      Thanks.

      I tried not to, but I kinda ment that line as saying lost in all whole being sence. not just love.

      and thanks :]

      • abuyi
        February 19

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        well if its not love then what the last line conveys "iam lost with out you".. i might be wrong on interpretation and i would like to know.. i related your write with the song and the song is about oneself and basically about being hurt.. your write differs there to me.. fix your typo "familiar"..i noticed it now

        • GlowstickOfLove
          February 19
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          Well, lets say i lost someone and i used to mirror their reactions. and now that they are gone im lost in totally emotional sence.
          its more of a mix of both of the song, and a view on life.

  • Peaches14
    February 19
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    oh my effing god.

    did you write that, or is that the lyrics?

  • Tide
    February 19

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    >.< Amazing
    Simply Amazing babe
    I listened to the song and although your poem did contain parts of it its still stunning.And you were right.Emotional is a good word to use when describing it ahah.But its still beautiful. I say this is one of your best.


    • GlowstickOfLove
      February 19
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      Awww :]
      Thanks :]
      It means [the poemage] means alot to me:]
      and of course, your comment.
      ily<4
      :]

  • TabbyJoy
    February 19

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    I'm not sure that I've read any of your other works, but I liked this ne. It managed to convey emotion without becoming "whiny." I have noticed this unusual style from several people,[enclosing some lines like this]and I really like it. I may have been inspired to attempt a new style of poetry in the near future. Thanks for sharing!


    • GlowstickOfLove
      February 19
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      Thanks. :]
      I tried something diffrent, and I'm glad it worked :]
      Glad someone liked it :]
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