Seeing flaxen hair under a coral glow,
silently I creep before striking the blow.
The skeletal frame slumps to the ground,
as the devils voice echoes, floating all round.
'Purge this world of good,
do a deed misunderstood.
Carve her up like roast beef,
feel the fountain of relief.'
Eyes peeled wide, crying cardinal tears,
I can almost smell her golden fear.
Consumed by terror on brink of insane,
lacerate the tongue so you can't complain.
Dark spheres descend on this bleak night,
under me she trembles, consumed in fright.
I dig the scalpel under sanguine nails,
bucking she screams, shouts and wails.
Excitement rising, I trace her skin,
acid pumps through steel veins within.
Infection seeping through every pore,
as sweet blood pools upon the floor.
Hunger begins to niggle, I clamp the bleed.
metallic tastes so good as I begin to feed.
Tauntingly I allow the knife to skilfully glide.
as a transparent glaze beholds your eyes.
A quick stab, they snap open and alert,
not much fun for me if you're too inert.
Struggling and fighting is part of the thrill,
makes for a more delightful kill.
Slicing your pasty gullet with an ample gash,
flecks of bone scatter, disperse when smashed.
Digesting the blood that leaches away,
while still keeping deaths icy grip at bay.
Salty tears are flowing fast and thick,
fevered eyes tremble 'make it quick'
My luxury peaking like roaring fires,
almost over whelmed by my desires.
Cracking the chest open wide,
I move on to what's concealed inside.
Twisting lungs until you expire,
looking down at what I require.
Cranium fractures with a brisk crack,
Bejewelled in divine fluid, ebony black
Spasmed muscles jerk then twitch
as arterial splatter shines ruby rich.
The sheen from the skull invigorates,
new thoughts begin to stimulate.
Peeling the flesh as the bone shatters,
ready to feast upon hidden grey matter.
Viscera collected, you're a mere shell,
soon the insects will invade and dwell.
Beetles will nibble upon your remains,
maggots will burrow within your veins.
Time now for me to go and feast,
Your innocence has been released.
As victims go you were the best...so far,
thank you my dear, you were a star.
Author notes
G - Gore - satisfy my blood-lust. Make me feel ill if you can. Something really violent.
**NB Although I like reading and writing this theme, I DO NOT promote it in any way**
Ok I wrote a new one, hehe couldn't resist not sure about it tho' its longer than I would normally write....may edit some before closing....
A contest entry
- Eye's of Madness by Synthetic-Nightmare.
1300 points, ended March 18, 2008, 25 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ****CALLING ALL DARK POETS**** by Erika Elektrikka.
2600 points, ended March 12, 2008, 32 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make 'Em Hurt by Wearychild.
550 points, ended April 12, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Alphabet Options by fakeport.
1000 points, ended June 12, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Darkest hour darkest day by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended May 25, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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My imagintation went wild with this one! I love the imagery! Good luck and thanks for entering!
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very neat your a finalist
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I'm speechless.....WOW! I loved it, it was just awesome. Bloody and a true work of art. Thank you for entering this, I hope all your pieces are like this.
Bloody wishes
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Wow
Such wonderful, sickening gore in perfect rhyme. Love it, you've satisfied my bloodlust, just like I asked. Thanks a lot for your entry
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wow great poem, pretty messed up but great imagery, i pretty much felt the pain, i thought my poems were messed up but geez u win, *bows low to floor in front of LadyDementia* great poem
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Wow.
First impression - a little singsongy, but improved by leaps and bounds as it went on. You've got a clear knack for this sorta thing; ought to try your hand at some "Splatterpunk" style prose. Horror's a wonderfully challenging creative field that only a few can really get right. You may be among those few. That you could acheive such a genuinely gruesome effect in rhyme is an accomplishment. Regards, Bill Masonis
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I LOVE the background, it fits perfectly! Thank you so much for entering, I absolutely Love this poem. Are you sure your not a killer? HAHAHA Good luck in contest.
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that if fucking insane and creep as hell....nice work....i really like the flow and rythemn. keep up the awesome work. and good luck
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Thanks You! =)
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Man, that was gruesome, and strangely awesome
Good Luck,
Erika
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A very nice work. I can never really get into rhyming at the cost of word selection, I tend to be more of a prose writer myself.
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wow, I'm really smart. Meant to click on the applause there... XD
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OMG I love this!!! Graphic, so dark, and amazing. Your word usage is extremely vivid--I could see the whole scene transpire. Loved the look inside the... ah... *interesting* killer's mind.
Well penned, poet; good luck in the contest...
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oh my god... that was the best i have read in quite a while!!!! AWSOME!!
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That was cool. Heh Heh. I like, I do. Keep writting!
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scary..awsome
I like this poem but I think it's border line erotica
so I'm not sure if it's quite right for this contest
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Erotica? Oh can't say that has ever crossed my mind to be honest, but everyone see different things when they read a piece
Glad you liked it.
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This is really good. Thanks for entering my contest and goodluck to you.
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Amazing write...I thoroughly loved this. Maybe your killer and mine should get together in the insane asylum and go on a killing spree...lol
Good luck to you.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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Now that would be a tale of gore...and then some
Thanks for R&R, much appreciated, as are they all
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WOW WOW and WOW triple WOW.....you always stun me with your poems...and now I am going to hide lol
excellent take on the prompt~ best to you in the contest sissy~ blessings always~ Trisha
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nice and cheerful to read just before dinner i think i will have double helpings - seriously though, a good poem, full of insane imagery.
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wow Lady D...this was completely stunning ..you have def outdone yourelf here....this was filled with gore..and the best kind...you never fail to amaze me....bravo....
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*hides under a blanket scared to come out*
OH.... MY.... GOD !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I thought I was gonna puke half way through that pahahahahaha
To steal your phrase hun.. WOWZERS!!!!! That was probably the most evil gruesome one you've done!!!
Syn has totally nailed it!!! I agree with her words..
You are a sick sick woman LOL.. J/K.. you know I luvs ya!!!
You're awesome hun... totally wicked this was!
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when you said you had something dark , you meant you had something dark, man, this is something, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Excellent!
I found myself unable to stop reading. This tale is woven well. Thanks for another wonderful write.
Blut Rot
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wow..DARK AND WONDERFUL
your rhyme and flow are wonderful..some typos in 13th verse L1..you're..for the contraction..6th verse L3..skillfully..2 "l"'s in skillfully..your imagery is fantastic..can absolutely view this as it is happening..very graphic..but that makes this write..very worth the read..best of luck in the contest and thanx so much for sharing..blessed be
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HOT.....
AS FUCK!
HOLY SHIT....
YAY!!! I'M GLAD YOU WROTE A NEW ONE!
CAUSE THIS ONE IS FUCKIN AMAZING! LMAO
Wow....i love EVERYTHING ABOUT IT! AND....I LOVE longer poems better than shorter cause there's more description and when reading poems about killers.....i get to the point where i don't want them to end. LOLOL
AND YOURS IS ONE OF THEM!
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