Loneliness is
When full
You have none to give!
A contest entry
- I'll prompt you by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended February 20, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Were you drunk when you wrote this.
Dude please stop.... For the love of god. -
I am drawn to the first line and believe it is exactly true. Certainly I will remember it. The last line does not follow my own thinking or experience, but it obviously is consistent with your own.
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Outstanding
This is witty and original -a profound thought that is full of truth. Sometimes I think that we forget what poetry is supposed to be about that fresh insight into the world that makes us think again. A thoughtful poem. Thank you for sharing.
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So true, Loneliness can devour our happiness and our will to go on. A great write. Your stunning few words create great imagery. Take care.
Sandy
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mindblowing! this was very good... very simple, short but impactful! >.< Great joib once again! And what u have said, is pretty true! Interesting interpretation of loneliness! keep penning...
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Yes, when full of 'lonely' self, then where is there to go?
The goodness of emptying expressed so simply,
Wonderful
Sol
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simpley stunning..I love the interprettation given here..so true and so deep..well done my friend..and thanks for commenting on my work...
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My good friend chilliwoman's is a good interpretation.
Here's mine: Loneliness is when one is so full of self there is nothing to give to others.
When one empties out the self there is nowhere for lonliness to dwell.
A thought provoking write.
Peace Georgia
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What a great way to look at being lonely. So sad really to be in such a situation. Very creative interpretation you have written of the prompt you were given.
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Yes this is true
by my interpretation, when you have had so much to deal with that your mind and senses and even your body feels full.... unless you can tell someone and put down some of the burden, then you are too full to be anything but lonely. And run out of anything to give. See me for marks cos i am a ten out of ten..... xx
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I also only see 9 words.... oops!!!
the poem itself is very differant
Best of luck in the contest!!
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too short, by one word? (9 instead of 10, if looking only at poem lol without title)
rereading reorients one completely as wanting to fit the rectangle of the page to the congruent comment box, not bored or blocked of understanding.
this may have an echo of blank faces asking why learn, when they don't feel a present relationship to provide for rather than just grade not to mention wonder of next impact motivation. there's a spin between emotions and accomplishment with the love the realest up builder...
a talent of heart,
babies are my subject
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