Disappearing into untouchable light,
As knives glisten in still sorrow,
The clang as it drops harmonous music,
As my ears severed from the pitch.
You call them scars,
As I twine an individual pattern in flesh,
I call it art,
Collecting blood like a source of need.
Screaming into a night hoping to be heard,
Problems raining in droplets I cry,
Missing out on happiness,
Pushing away all that counts,
I lie alone.
Cursing the happiness that shines in peoples faces,
I killed them one by one,
As my hair flys wild ignorant to the stares,
Caring stopped when you didn't love me.
I sliced your name of pain,
Scarred upon my tortured body,
Beauty
Laughed
At
My
Art
Stolen tears left me dry with fear.
Author notes
just weird about someone i know really well but will never see me this way i guess its twisted but yeah. I CANT tell him coz he will hate me (i guess you have my life story)
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OMG!
I Love it. Dark Deep and to the point. -
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thanks for your comment
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this is my favourite poem on this site so far
love the line:
"Caring stopped when you didn't love me."
keep up the good work -
:)
This is so beautiful
I love the way you write em...u can always picture what you are talking about in your mind
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Although this poem does involve cutting, which I normally do not read, I think you did a good job at rendering your experiences realistically and sculpting them into images. I think this piece is strongest and the beginning and the end, when you use the most charged images and concrete thematic ideas. One can easily see -- with your opening lines of "severed ears" and your ending heart wrenching, unflinching, memorial to beauty -- that you clearly don't need to spell out your emotions. In fact, it is stronger if you don't -- objective correlative will do the trick. For me, the last line of "stolen tears" impairs the elegance and sheer anguish of "beauty laughed at my art." I think simply ending at "art." will give your poem a pregnant sense of finality and dolor. Thank you very much for your entry. I enjoyed reading.
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you inspired me to write:$
“Must Cut to Live”
• Once again pains has come
I am drowning soon I will die
I have to find a way
To take my pains away
My dagger goes to glitter
Asking me to be a slitter
My blood is black
I have to make a canal for its track
• My knife I have to submit
Blood must blow to permit
Blood to erupt and emit
So veins will burst and spit
Then all my pains will quit
As soon as my flesh starts to split
Then I have to knit
So the scar won’t seem to be a pit
• I must cut to go on
So I could witness the light of dawn
I have to sigh I have to moan
Until my pains are gone
Until agony is withdrawn
I must make a red lawn
I shall not succumb to fawn
Instead I must drive my blade forward on
• I must cut and bust
I must propel it out of my crust
I mustn’t let my blade to rust
I must keep it away from the dust
I must impel blood in a thrust
So robust pain and blood must combust
My body is in deep lust
To make my blood explode and bust
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hunnnnnnn plzzz i begg never cut again plzz:S u made me cry with this poem :S:S its deep its great so emotional but much painfull:S
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aye ive been trying its hard though
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omg.
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Beautiful
I really liked your poem ... I could hear the pain from the words and the images were very vivid.
Cursing the happiness that shines in peoples faces,
I killed them one by one,
I liked this part allot ... just spoke to me really.
There is just one thing that I know ... I need to read it again! I get something else each time I read it ... keep it up ...
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*story
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yeah stiry of my life too. excellent poem. i loved it!
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one two three look up and look down you see the ground you see the sky where do you belong lower then dirt higher then an angeL? is that possible? hmm.. great poem nice flow graet piece feel the emotion.. what got me was "Pushing away all that counts,
I lie alone." if you look up and down.. you wont see no one.. look next to you.. always someone.. even if its secret words in you.. heh im getting to much into it hey in all great poen =] i hope i dont freak you lmao i hope you get what im trying to say -
nice vivid images, pretty much each line put a new one in my head. what a great write.
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Good
I once had problems with harming myself and I can relate to the message you are sending in this poem. It is hard when you see people literally glowing with happiness and you can't help but think why isn't that you. I thought this poem was very beautiful and has lots of meaning.
-Chloe
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Holy shit!!!
This is prob one of tha best fucking poems I.ve ever read.....
No lie.
The way you describe everthing is excelent and DAMN! this is prob your best one....EVER!(in my opinion)
It would be impossible for me to choose my favorite part because the whole damn thing was perfect.
Great Damn Job
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This flippin rocks my socks I loved the flow the emotion just pours off the page and it touched that small secret place in my heart that we all have well written good job
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Wow--
Wow this is great good flow and well versed and I liked how you presented it!!
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I was pleasantly surprised with this. The emotions and depth poured into this were flawless and quite intense... I give you props for originality as well... overall, not bad.
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