a careen
of unveiled lovers
in a tangle of
fleshy fate
upon the velvet sheets
of ethereal love
friction
rippling from
teasing lovers' lip
to shivering thigh
gasping breaths
through faint sighs
intense silence
as their lips meet
warm
delicate kisses
longing deeply
for heat that lies within
ignite this flame
from dancing spark
to ever blazing inferno
fingers gripping
muscles deep in pleasure
as skin of two
becomes of one
souls brush
skin ceaselessly
flowing...
in moments of
perpetual love.
Author notes
This is the first slightly erotic poem... I have ever tried. I tried to make it more sensual then erotic... And I think I prevailed. ~~~
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A contest entry
- Erotic Pleasures by Jonathan Wikkins.
525 points, ended June 1, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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great piece! the only thing i didn't like is i had to highlight it in order to read it...
didn't affect my judging though!
good luck in my contest, and thanks for entering
mike, aka jonathan wikkins -
Well Done!!!!
I must agree artis, this is beautiful!! The imagery is reality!! I mean this is perfect to me!!
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prevail hardly covers it, i became immersed in the silky flow of it all, such a gentle touch caressing each bend of the verbs, and nothing in the way of a dangling participle, everything was smoothly polished to a blissful sheen...Artis
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I totally agree with your authors notes that it's more sensual than erotic, you've penned quite a work of art here and you should be quite pleased with it. Thanks for entering it
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