Pasts suddenly become crystal clear
as truths unfold from lies and sins of the world.
Choosing the future as if I'm looking
through a crystal ball that's covered in fog.
Blindly following the dusty past
covered with twigs and branches scraping my skin.
Tears escaping my eyes and sighs my lips;
the path of life that lies uncovered.
The crystal eye of knowledge unknown,
is such a gift, worthy of it's nickname of
through the looking glass.
Author notes
For a contest! Prompt: Through the lookingglass.
A contest entry
- DFI Round 3 ~ Through the Looking Glass by And Hyetal.
850 points, ended March 15, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~~~THE PROMPT CHALLENGE #1 ~~~ by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended March 23, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think please! Does this make sense to you all?
Comments
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Very pretty and the thoughts are so optimistic that it makes me feel so relaxed and good!!
thanks for entering and good luck!
pri
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Imagery: 1 point
Theme: 1 point
Use of Form/Flow: 1 point
Other criteria: 0 points
Overall Appeal: 1 point
The punctuation helped with the flow of the poem, but I think the lines were a little bit too long. Try shortening them up!
Everything else was nice... I really like the way the title of the poem connected to the rest of the piece. Nice work.
~Cassie
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