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Scattered

 

 

 

Endless tears fall

prayers being said

my ashes carefully scattered

 

 

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10 Words
Prompt: My Last Ashes

A contest entry

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  • Samplette gold member
    August 27
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    A strong piece of poetry. Powerful 10 words. Nicely crafted. I enjoyed the read very much. Hope you are well.
    Sam


  • Christina-is-crazy
    August 11
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    this is great! i loved it, u said alot in 10 words
    xoxo- christina
  • Susan E. Pennycuff gold member
    August 11

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    This poem really has a Haiku feel to it and unless I miscounted it is 17 syll. The first and second lines have two completely different thoughts and the third line bring them together with that aha factor ( they were YOUR ashes)... awesome job here my friend


  • Elisabeth Strange
    August 10
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    what an effective poem!


  • Immortally Yours gold member
    July 25
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    So powerful hun! I love how great this is for only 10 words. beautiful ...

  • Blackeye3825
    July 23
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    NICE

    SMALL WORDS SAIDS A LOTT ABOUT WHAT YOU THINK

  • Erica Carnea
    July 6
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    so much meaning in so little words. nicley done.
    love always
    erica carnea
    x.x.x.x.x.x


  • xXDarkChildXx
    July 1

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    Such a wonderful short and simple poem. I wonder what I am going to do with my grandma's ashes :/ Very nice job. It'll be interesting to see what else you can write.

  • Valley Girl gold member
    May 17

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    Wow! This says so much in such few words! You really have captured the prompt. It is such an emotional deep write. Fantastic job bro!

  • Matt Holck
    March 8
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    speaks in breaths

  • Manicmuze
    March 8
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    this is very well done... quite the impact.
    a sad visual
    enjoyed the read,
    ~ wendy

  • Kiku.nee-chan
    March 2

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    Short, sweet, and sad! I am unable to write these short but powerful ones like you have. X] Excellent job.

  • unsigned gold member
    March 1
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    Yes...it would be the way one would want it...

    Well expressed

    S/A


  • Cynthia
    February 26

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    Excellent

    Oh wow!!!!!
    This is a fantastic choice of words.
    Well done.

    Keep up with the great work.
    Keep on penning.
    Thank you so very much for sharing.
    *S* Cynthia


  • Valley Girl gold member
    February 22
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    Wow! This is such a fantastic use of a prompt! It is so sad! I can picture this scene so well. You have really created a wonderful piece. Thanks for sharing.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 21

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    Perfectly Inscribed

    With few words you have done a wonderful job bro.
    Thanks for sharing here, and all the best within the contest!

    -Timothy


  • Hekate gold member
    February 18

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    awwww this was like..beautifully sad here..I don't know how to describe it lol anyway well done, and best of luck


  • Friday gold member
    February 18

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    A lovely write in simplicity.
    This was beautiful Jeremy.
    You could almost see everything.
    Good luck
  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 18
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    This is the last of ashes thanks for your entry have a great night
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