The undisputed truth
busy signals from the cramped cold telephone booth
truth is I'm a waste of time
stranded downtown
I've spent my last dime
Tears fall in aged wrinkles
Mother Earth's November showers ever falling ever sprinkles
I'll add this to my things to do list
Forget your name and relocate to Massachusetts
Where big city sounds me up to wake
because I'm sick of pretending your love pretending was fake
a life left behind forgotten with time
our love like cheap wine fermenting sour like lime
I'd say my goodbyes if I knew how to release
I unlocked my heart but you ran away with the keys
You're just a star glowing faint in the far-off distance
You're the one that I loved the one that granted my wishes
Author notes
This is still a work in progress, and I don't consider any of my work to be completely finished. All constructive criticism and brutal honesty will be greatly appreciated. bull3t2b1n0ry
A contest entry
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Comments
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i really like this! it has a lot of great description in it. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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i cannot understand this poem one bit, but i love it so much!! Its really great! i love how its November showers instead of april. cute.
Thanks for entering -
Painful heart felt poem of lost love. Awwwwwwwwwww - but great job really! P.S. She must not have been "the one"
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Yeah I kinda understand it, but not as much. However the good news is that I did like some of the verses that I thought were VERY beautiful.
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you have some great one liners that i should steal and shout at some guys i know! lol this was really flippin good! just needs to be tweaked a little and i think you should leave it with what you have so far! i enjoyed this one! i can relate very well. this was the mind frame i was in when i made this contest! thank you for entering and best of luck to you!
NineTailedFox
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Amazing write, especially here:
The undisputed truth
busy signals from the cramped cold telephone booth
truth is I'm a waste of time
Very relatable. -
because I'm sick of pretending your love pretending was fake
I loved this and if you add more please let me know when you are finished! -
"The undisputed truth
busy signals from the cramped cold telephone booth
truth is I'm a waste of time
stranded downtown"
"I unlocked my heart but you ran away with the keys"
I like this one a lot
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