Fall to my knees to life I no longer live
Incense and chant
Forgiveness with a prayer
Never understood the need
The faith in something unseen
Bright light in the dimness of reality
Painted shadows thrown across the naive
When morning light shines through saviors
Well orchestrated pageantry
Sing a song of salvation
A song of repentance
Beautiful music so judgemental
What is there for me in a faith left behind
The endless shroud of purgatory
Choices that have made belief distasteful
Will my soul be doomed in the rot of oblivion
If I embrace the words will I still drown
In the sinful pit of dispare I have created
Gone are the child's eyes of awe
Obedience lost in left brain realities
To pray for ignorance would be ideal
Punishment upon me if only through my own hand
For ideals and promises and vows broken
Dogma ends my devotion without communion
A contest entry
- I want to believe by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended March 2, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful
Very creative and well expressed. A terrific write. Congratulations on the honorable mention
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deep wrote poem u have a way with words... to make poeple thank good job!
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thank you
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This is brilliant! Thanks for entering.
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Thank you
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Very well written, smart write.... Best of luck in the contest.
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whisper
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thank you
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wow this is a good piece. i like it. it is different. you have a great piece here. i HEART it.
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wow...a very strong write full of internal turmoil. some good imagery here....and some truly great lines..."punishment upon me..." & the last line were my favorites. thanks for sharing these thoughts.
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Thank you so much for your comment. I appreciate it greatly
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