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T T Tootsie


Tootsie Tootle
tonights -terrible tart,
tenderly, triumphantly
teasing Tommy Tootle’s
tormented testosterone.
Today Tommy
turned thirty three,
though,
the Tommy think tank
testily throb’s,
titillatingly, twenty-two.

Tootsie, thinking that
the tiresome tussle
to tolerate tradition tame,
transgresses to tactless taboos.
Thighs thrust
tongues tickle
tools tick turgid,
they toss, tumble,
testing theorising,
topping,
their terrific ten

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just trying out for a new competition.

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  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    February 25, 2008

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    9pts...

    Thank you for this wonderful contribution to The Poetic Bandits reading list

    ~Lilac


  • wakingdevil
    February 23, 2008

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    Oo...a wonderful plaeides piece you've written.You used them so many many times and yet it didn't seem forced.Well done, Good luck


  • Shamanicmusings
    February 21, 2008
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    Very good now you deserve a nice cup of "T"


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 20, 2008

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    The mighty t's written in this poem - alliterations to the extreme here! LOL Certainly makes for interesting reading - like a huge tough tongue twister - humorous too.

  • The Pole Star
    February 20, 2008

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    WOW what a style...got me a smile and impressed me a lot...must have been a tough write though...I believe that I will myself try it someday...

    Thanks for sharing and Keep penning



    The Pole Star


  • Polaja Greeters member
    February 19, 2008
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    This is a wonderful poem it made me smile... I love that you tried this style and it came out so well... I'm always a fan of alliteration, but writing something like this would be beyond me! Brilliantly done, this was a very enjoyed read

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • animated lies
    February 19, 2008

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    Haha, quite different from your typical erotica poetry... Its much more light hearted. And it makes sense! Nice job.


  • warrior-eagle
    February 19, 2008

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    This made me laugh,
    specially all the words
    starting with T's
    hope you did well
    on the competition.
    Lol.
    Good work.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • Twinstar gold member
    February 18, 2008

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    Great job on this! Well crafted and with wonderful alliteration. A much enjoyable read!

    Love & Light
    Debbera


  • AddictiveTRUTH
    February 18, 2008
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    Interesting write you have penned here

    I think you did very well.
    Ephiphany♥


  • The Hermit
    February 18, 2008
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    That is amazing that you put that together and a great ending of a bedroom situation


  • Lady Altheia
    February 18, 2008

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    Well happy birthday to Tommy who landed someone ten years younger. I really liked all those T alliterations.


  • albymyheart gold member
    February 18, 2008

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    Lol! Oh... Amazing! What a prodigious heap of alliteration! And a unique talent to pen in such a disciplined way. I love it!

    I liked the last seven lines the best. A great description of a somewhat erratic bedroom interlude.Lol.
    Thank you
    alby

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