The boat beneath the stage
Drifts deeper now
I turn my face away
I am not of your age
But faster now
The turning of the page
Please tell me what you think
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Good work here
The depth of this piece is bottomless for yes as we grow we do turn ther page and become more efficient to life
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Wondefully written! I love rhyme myself so I loved the flow of this. My take on your poem is of a may, december romance. Beautiful!
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i really liked this, short not over indulgent and makes a craving for more..
to turn the page
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This is an amazing poem, but I'm sorry that I'll have to DQ. You see, I was looking for a poem that describes the life of one of the overlooked characters-Carlotta, etc.- and I'm sorry, but this doesn't follow those options. Feel free to enter a different poem following those options!!! I would love it if you would!
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masterly use of rhyme, deep which is the sign they say of good poetry. this poem made me think. it is very clever. i turn my face away is a very complex thought provoking line and it works for me - well done dear friend and i encourage you to keep writing you have a talent for poetry - honestly, fine write well done -
You have penned lovely words about this wonderful show. One of my favorites. Stunning imagery. Best of luck in the contest. Take care, Sandy
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Wow!
That is so full of life, in just a few lines. I think it's a wonderful piece!
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